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qwarter told me to post this in open mic. hope this is that section.

my eyes closed but my eyelids show/ what everyone can think is knowledge but dont know/ and eveyone beleive they scholars but dont progress/ progression has its blocks its stepping stones in the process/ but i will never stop regression is not an option/ so tryin ta hold me down is forgiven but not forgotten/ cause kindness equals weakness in street terms/ so now my hearts cold as seasons when leafs turn/ from full of life to brillo padded like crack pipes/ the opposite of what defines it its black light/ and if its hard to define then trust it bring fright/ its terror to the left for the wing of the right/ its trying ta get bteer when better is in your mindstate/ blame it on your heart but decisions is what your mind make/ they blame it on the art say rappin raisin the crime rate/ but all im shootin off is these lyrics reciprocate man

/ cause kindness equals weakness in street terms/ so now my hearts cold as seasons when leafs turn/ from full of life to brillo padded like crack pipes

pretty descent drop though i did the same mistake of not separatin my bars ....just press enter when u at the und of the line... then continue..it helps us readers of ur shit a lot an might get u more feed..

You have potential. Structure your bars so their more readable and make your thoughts coherent. You may understand what you're writing, but you want the reader to understand what you sayin' too. Decent vocab.

Keep elavatin'.