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Tilt-A-Whirl

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GBu44ta1F1I


I strangle techniques, make em bend to my demented time skills
strangle em in the air, fact is I could help push pests aside, ill
infect the minds will, cause it to melt in the hands of props
call me Salvador Dali, dumbfounding all, demanding all thoughts
I overstand looks, my portrayal alone could leave Rembrandt shook
while the stairs crumble, I stand fearless like the art of Grant Wood
I understand the vast flow, and reiterate errythin' till the facts known
to dumb it down or not, shakespearian minus a reason to attract shows
I got more clarity with rap flows then most do in a glassed bowl
spark it up and listen homie, that's only if you ain't minituare Van Gogh's
you could say I'ma mosaic, faced to deface those, Rene Megritte
either get left slain in the streets, or find yourself deframed from speech
now let's move on to the most thoughtful of all the missing link'd apostles
the stroke of Da Vinci and the signifigance to rethink such Picasso's
so unlawful bending each thought in each movement of all mankind
it's like Einstein grabbed a no 2 pencil and etched life into his last lines
flatlined then deprived poetry from the hands that grasped Isaac Newton
I enlightened views hun, showed y'all the gravity of the tightened n loosen'd


of course it's another written
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Re: Tilt-A-Whirl

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I understand the vast flow, and reiterate errythin' till the facts known
to dumb it down or not, shakespearian minus a reason to attract shows
I got more clarity with rap flows then most do in a glassed bowl
spark it up and listen homie, that's only if you ain't minituare Van Gogh's
This piece was tight... i like the use of artist.. tho kinda similar to the nba one... maybe not but it reminded me of it... The quote i think flowed well and showcases some vocab.. used right in my opinion...cause i see when people just put shit in there to make it sound right.. Like me... LOL... good flow good topic..good drop..bla bla bla... i read it and liked it..
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Re: Tilt-A-Whirl

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Lol, interesting historical references.

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you could say I'ma mosaic, faced to deface those, Rene Megritte
either get left slain in the streets, or find yourself deframed from speech
now let's move on to the most thoughtful of all the missing link'd apostles
the stroke of Da Vinci and the signifigance to rethink such Picasso's
so unlawful bending each thought in each movement of all mankind
it's like Einstein grabbed a no 2 pencil and etched life into his last lines
flatlined then deprived poetry from the hands that grasped Isaac Newton
I enlightened views hun, showed y'all the gravity of the tightened n
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Re: Tilt-A-Whirl

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qwarterzone wrote:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GBu44ta1F1I


I strangle techniques, make em bend to my demented time skills
strangle em in the air, fact is I could help push pests aside, ill
infect the minds will, cause it to melt in the hands of props
call me Salvador Dali, dumbfounding all, demanding all thoughts
I overstand looks, my portrayal alone could leave Rembrandt shook

By far my favorite allusion in the whole piece.

while the stairs crumble, I stand fearless like the art of Grant Wood
I understand the vast flow, and reiterate errythin' till the facts known
to dumb it down or not, shakespearian minus a reason to attract shows
I got more clarity with rap flows then most do in a glassed bowl

This could have been better.

spark it up and listen homie, that's only if you ain't minituare Van Gogh's
you could say I'ma mosaic, faced to deface those, Rene Megritte
either get left slain in the streets, or find yourself deframed from speech
now let's move on to the most thoughtful of all the missing link'd apostles
the stroke of Da Vinci and the signifigance to rethink such Picasso's

Good bar.

so unlawful bending each thought in each movement of all mankind
it's like Einstein grabbed a no 2 pencil and etched life into his last lines

PURDY dope


flatlined then deprived poetry from the hands that grasped Isaac Newton
I enlightened views hun, showed y'all the gravity of the tightened n loosen'd

Not a good ending either.


of course it's another written
Overall. A solid piece that could have used a bit more tweaking, but even with its flaws, the references to the artists were enough to keep it appearing sharper than it really was for the whole time.
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Re: Tilt-A-Whirl

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i didnt like the ending much. i like everything up to it and i think it should have been buildin up it would be hard to top some of that and keep the concept together but it would have been one of my favorite drops if you could of
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