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i'm backed into a corner willin to stike back
probations ruined my life, yeah its like that
so i'm speeding in this vehicle hopin i might crash
before i do somethin rash when the blue an red lights flash
cause i've been drunk since i first opened my frige
my eye lids were pried and fried quick when i looked at my digs
cant afford a decent place let alone 2 CSC Classes
so i'm feeling drastic as i lube this semi automatic
cause i've had it yeah i know what cops are strapped wit
but i'm disrupting traffic smokin crack an laughing
some would call me suicidal but then why do i have this rifle
wit 10 clips which hold 20 each call me mr. homicidal
swerving verrin through lanes in this car without a title
yeah i'm prideful but this world has turned me to a physco
theres a black an white in front me now this shit is on
i accelerate to 80 grabing this 380 hopin not to time it wrong
i pull aside along give him the finger than swipe this pawn
2 shots ring out oh wait it Was just one....
my shit car back fired and i sent a bullet to bust his lung
the cop spun looked confused and reached for his gun
thats why i packed this S.K.S and buck shot loaded pump
i crash into the side of him and unload this Mossberg
no i aint a gangster i just want to see cops hurt!
he passed he didnt last past the second round
back up heard it on the radio they comin wit fully auto weapons now
the seconds drown as i proceed into a cop chase
cept i'm not trying to get away so you wont see it on Cops tapes
i drop 8 hits of E. and look for a long straight
hit 100 slam on the brakes and reach an armed state
start unload everything i have into police cruisers
bystanders are safe cause i'm only aimin at these losers
i must up dropped at least 9 of um before i was first hit
it burst in my left thigh to high for it to hurt quick
dropped 2 more fore another one pierce my right sholder
but in my holster theres a dirty surprise wit five bolders
a .50 loaded and unloaded with deadly precision
makin grapefruit sized incisions in half their devision
im down to one clip smiling for once in fucking years
momma dont shed no tears because i died with out a fear
i smell the scent of gas as an M16 rips a slash in calves
i let out my last laugh feel the bullet than all goes black....


later that week a news report in the times is found
Modern defiance aged 22 deceased, in a little idaho town
cause of death 15 shots with one to the crainium
he murder 36 cops with bullets dipped in liquid titianium
at the killers house was the only clue to his fit of rage
his criminal history with cops names written on a page
with 9 words written with what seemed to be his blood

'DRASTIC ACTIONS is what will happen to the above"

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"so i'm feeling drastic as i lube this semi automatic
cause i've had it yeah i know what cops are strapped wit
but i'm disrupting traffic smokin crack an laughing
some would call me suicidal but then why do i have this rifle
wit 10 clips which hold 20 each call me mr. homicidal "

Great job of describing the scenario. Very elaborate.

"later that week a news report in the times is found
Modern defiance aged 22 deceased, in a little idaho town
cause of death 15 shots with one to the crainium
he murder 36 cops with bullets dipped in liquid titianium
at the killers house was the only clue to his fit of rage
his criminal history with cops names written on a page
with 9 words written with what seemed to be his blood

'DRASTIC ACTIONS is what will happen to the above"

Great conclusion.

The story was pretty decent, I actually liked it, if I were to complain at all, it might be for the simplicity of the story, not the actual rhyming.

Kind of a throw back to Nas on "It was Written". Different than most drops I read on here, but in a good way.

The flow was very on point as well. The only recommendation that I'd give you, if you'd allow me to, is when you write something like this, to challenge yourself with every rhyme (at the end of the bar) to be as clear as possible, not just every detail.

thankz for the feed man, i was on that ole fuck the police tip...

uppin

Damn....Modern is back

I always enjoy reading your pieces bruh

my eye lids were pried and fried quick when i looked at my digs
cant afford a decent place let alone 2 CSC Classes
so i'm feeling drastic as i lube this semi automatic
cause i've had it yeah i know what cops are strapped wit
^^^^^^^that was sick

I always liked the way you intertwine your rhymes
and make them flow so smoothly, very sick shit
I think you need to keep droppin' bro..

welcome back bro lol

your flow was choppy at points it seemed you werent trying to really rhyme storyy was good tho really liked the read it even came down to a good end nice shit i xpect to read more from you so keep it up

cause i've been drunk since i first opened my frige
my eye lids were pried and fried quick when i looked at my digs
cant afford a decent place let alone 2 CSC Classes
so i'm feeling drastic as i lube this semi automatic
cause i've had it yeah i know what cops are strapped wit
but i'm disrupting traffic smokin crack an laughing

Dope as well as crazy

the seconds drown as i proceed into a cop chase
cept i'm not trying to get away so you wont see it on Cops tapes
i drop 8 hits of E. and look for a long straight
hit 100 slam on the brakes and reach an armed state

Just nasty dude!

a .50 loaded and unloaded with deadly precision
makin grapefruit sized incisions in half their devision

Just had to quote that

Ill story telling skillz duke!

thanks for the feed fellas, been off site for a while nice to see this shiz is still active