Hip Hop Forum

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With some of the subjects that you touched on, I would expect this drop to be a lot more aggressive. That is just an observation, not a critique.

As for the verses, they were quite mediocre. If I were you, I would strive to keep a bit more consistency, I know its easier said than done, but a few of your bars "love for the streets", "covers and sheets", "felonies", "telling me". You're falling in a trap, where you're relying on the scheme instead of creativity. That is very important to remember.

The third verse was probably the strongest to me. Nothing terrible though, its not like this is garbage, a great verse to record for a beginner or someone who is just getting into it.

Thx for the feed, I'll work on that

i wld love to collab wit ya but i aint sure if u want me to be on it??

of course you can collab dude i'm not gonna be a dick about it... just make sure it's real and from the heart no " i'm so ill i am cold and kill" or anything lol

this shit right here was nice i liked the read but it was very weak vocab wise very ez to follow almost to the point it was boring but it still kept my attention work on using more complexity in your rhymes maybe some multis, inner multis, punches, or even strong metaphors listen to some different kinds of artist like copywrite or jr writer, maybe old skwl big daddy kane or rakim widen your knowledge of the rap game and you will improve

out of the ones i read of yours this is my favorite. decent story tellin and a real message. but rap has evolved basic ryhmes and rhyme schemes cant hold up unless you wanna be a ringtone. not trying to step on you i really enjoyed this one.