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Gastric thrashes, as your anatomy smashes
Biotic acids, split nucleus, turn atoms to ashes
Murder fanatics, spit danger to verbalize my tactics
hit drastic, puncture skin more then heroin addicts
Paralyze actions, there lies your body in fractions
Organize factions, lose of volume, a violent Atkins
slice and dice, knife slice at a 30 degree angle
Wait till your dead then murder your guardian angel
Go all out Al Capone so I can hone my skill
Break bones, die in laughter as I watch blood spill
Soul subdued, rip it out through an open wound
Don’t conclude , untill I turn your corpse to food
Enforce religion, hang you in your own chapel
Another incision, make you ingest your Adams apple
To stop me from killing, got to perform an exorcist
Assailant actionist, and never care who’s neck it is


Scorched abyss, deadly fumes, terror from a unholy mass
where there souls once exists, evil wraths burn flesh to ash
Visuals consist of the past, with death exposed massive
Reminisce the passed, with flags draped over closed caskets
Lavished grin, warfare carries with tenacity of leviathan
Shredded skin, scrapes, scars and soars seek what lies within
Bad intentions, to open wounds and exposed intestines
Fight with envy, no exception, shoot first and rebel questions
Deeply composed lessons, with the vaccine and needles faulty
Vital signs no heartbeat, fear continues with cerebral palsy
Deceitful verbs, cause these words to hit an artery
Now loss of blood, death and war brings out the art in me
Innocence killed, thrills supply my adrenaline rush
No peroxide for cuts, damaged and scuffed till anger erupts
Catastrophes create a force to make your bones tear
When heavy impacts intact, always beware of lyrical warfare

I don't think you wrote this. I'm sorry..

turn atoms to ashes
Murder fanatics, spit danger to verbalize my tactics
hit drastic, puncture skin more then heroin addicts
Paralyze actions,

This was cool but everything before it didn't do anything 4 Me but add more to read.

slice and dice, knife slice at a 30 degree angle
Wait till your dead then murder your guardian angel

Alright ..

Soul subdued, rip it out through an open wound
Don’t conclude , untill I turn your corpse to food
Enforce religion, hang you in your own chapel
Another incision, make you ingest your Adams apple

got the feel you were Looking 4 .
this was some gory type of shit lol good bars

To stop me from killing, got to perform an exorcist
Assailant actionist, and never care who’s neck it is

Not a hard ender.

Scorched abyss, deadly fumes, terror from a unholy mass
where there souls once exists, evil wraths burn flesh to ash

U Have Ash in both verses same bar/Line. Is that on purpose?


Visuals consist of the past, with death exposed massive
Reminisce the passed, with flags draped over closed caskets

Alright..


Lavished grin, warfare carries with tenacity of leviathan
Shredded skin, scrapes, scars and soars seek what lies within

Like the last bar.


Second verse was Rushed.


First Verse Was better then the Second in .My. Opinion

u Have Potential though, This Was Decent

Keep up n stay dropping

thanks for feedback... to be honest i wrote this than what u think catch