Hip Hop Forum

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dude... i gotta say this was pretty dope... good written would go hard on a beat... put a hook behind it extend the verses to make em fit the beat... would be sick i'd love to hear it... i'd say the most memorable lines in this were

Tired of being an adult it's really not what I thought
And gettin mugged puts a different meaning to poppin a glock
Tired of being poor, tired of being treated like shit
One day I'll be rich and then you're gonna swallow my dick

and...

People with everything handed to THEM want competition with ME?
Gotta be kiddin me, please- I pay tuition and fees
I wash dishes to eat and you take trips in the Keys

We're "not in the same league" like the Clippers and Heat
Tired of cosigning fees just to pay for a writing degree

But then I'll qualify to be so rich that'll you'll be tired of me

i'll give it a 8/10 creative bruh real creative... good shit man... keep it up

I do like this..even tho im against repetition... It got a message out..a real one that would make me wanna grind hard to get mines so im not in that position lol... Nice flow to it when the lines did not have im tired in front of them... But like law said...i bet it would sound hot on an audio...