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I Dug The Whole Drop But This is What Stuck 2 Me..

They say everytime ones lost there's a new child that's born
Well I tell ya what they took love now that fuckin child is scorned
If we live to die while we're dying to live through these miles of sin
Could you tell me why we even bother fightin with survival again?

Keep it Pushin' Kid.. Stay Up

mayne this is one of the dopest pieces, we should have an option to favourite scriptures, this would be up there amongst the greats, the mutlies were dope will the flow and the the realness, the whole piece was one big quoteable, i know some people gonna come in here and say yeah it's dope but wasnt great, well i think it was that damm great and this should be made a classic, we will see for the end of year awards hopefully haha

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Watched him roam the valley in the shadow at his hour of death
I've seen many men die but, by far this was the sourest yet

Theres a deep impact in that bar and it being worded the way it is delivers it perfectly

They say everytime ones lost there's a new child that's born
Well I tell ya what they took love now that fuckin child is scorned
If we live to die while we're dying to live through these miles of sin
Could you tell me why we even bother fightin with survival again?

Now i have used this term loosely... but this piece is certainly one of the best ive seen.. i want to read the previous pieces as well but this one on its own stands well..U brought madd emotion on this and wrote something worthy of understanding...This Is A Great Drop...

Really nice drop. The flow was perfect. Multies were on point and the story telling was dope.

Sometimes times are hard and your mind is scarred
You ever get a feeling like you're sitting behind some bars?
You reach out to grab the shining stars that shine afar
I get there and forget to grasp it because with time i mar

This stood out the most IMO. Really opened it up for a nice drop. The last bar I quoted flowed real nice.

Far from the greatest but I feel as if I've earned my respect
Then I look back to see everyone givin earnest neglect
Concerned so I check turn so quick there's a burn in my neck
Sometimes it's hard but I still try to follow a rhyme scheme
I just write in hopes that I can place these times behind me

dope barres right there, i was feeling most of it some parts feel off mostly just structurally and sylyblally
wise but i dug the message bein portrayed

good drop man

Yo man. This is sick! Your flow is nice you gonna make these audio? Mmm. I like that it has emotion in it aswell kinda has a poetry feel to it at times. Good shit mate. Keep em comin

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I was feeling this piece man, it's got that real life edge to it
which is purdy much what you wrote it for, the quotables I was going to quote were already quoted
so I'ma just say.......hopefully you keep writing man! keep your head up


deep piece bruh

U gotta lot to say lol.. ur stuff guud..

1st a quote

Watched him roam the valley in the shadow at his hour of death
I've seen many men die but, by far this was the sourest yet
Lost close to a hundred pounds I watched him wither and wilt
No time but, I ask why and cry as I wither with guilt

damn this right here actually made me feel bad. and for me this was a written snippet of actual emotion. def something that made me sit back. nice drop. i look forward to this series continuation.

sick dawg very ill homie. This makes a dude wanna jump on the Why I Write bandwagon no lie you deserve some award 4 dis. This stood out 2 me and I ain't even notice it guess I need 2 look thru drops when I got time been hella busy... u kno how life be getting in the way tho. Why I Write had 6 dope pieces which made it a dope series and all good things come to an end.., sometimes haha. Keep doing your thing TOYH if you don't get an award for these pieces then I dunno wat 2 say really. You should def do another 1 like this tho cuz this was sick it would be pretty dope if other peps did it 2 not sure if it's been done b4. If you're the 1st then much props homie keep droppin' and I'll be lookin' out 4 da next series.

-- 06 Jul 2010 13:17 --

4got 2 add this my bad fam
Once again another dope drop I liked the whole piece but I felt this outta the whole thing

Far from the greatest but I feel as if I've earned my respect
Then I look back to see everyone givin earnest neglect
Concerned so I check turn so quick there's a burn in my neck
Sometimes it's hard but I still try to follow a rhyme scheme
I just write in hopes that I can place these times behind me
Watched him roam the valley in the shadow at his hour of death
I've seen many men die but, by far this was the sourest yet

Far from the greatest but I feel as if I've earned my respect
Then I look back to see everyone givin earnest neglect
--- good line here

Sometimes it's hard but I still try to follow a rhyme scheme
I just write in hopes that I can place these times behind me
---- this line ties the piece together for me. being in the middle it adds to your dope scheme of things here.

Papi, gone? It's a burden I'm hurtin in turn murkin the burban
If life's a straight road then why the fuck am I jerkin and swervin?
---- my favorite line of the whole joint! too real bro.


overall i liked this read alot. great scheme in things i felt. stayed on point in my head and its full of hard landing lines. nice work bro.