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I Can't Believe It, This Year I Fell A Numerous Amount of Times
Shits Dubious Thee Way The Charge Has Been Declined, I Say This State of Mind.. Pathetic
I Play Jon B. Cool Relax & Seek A Medic, Speech Verbs Are Known 2 Determine The Outcome
I Speak Prophetic
Chill Lemme Do My Own Thing, I'm Livin' in A Box & Gotta Beat My Own Spring
Were Toe Ta Toe Square Dancin' On Cubic Ft. As Our Blows Ring
My Limbs Wobble As The Tide Waves My Ankles Sleepin' in The Ocean
Slight Dreams Snap Out of It.. Counterfeit? Nah I'll Just Counter it,
Pitchin' Fast Ones Off The Mound After Tobbaco-Chews & County Spits
Reach Out A Bit.. If Anyone Grabs My Hand.. I Might Be Able 2 Get Out of It
Shit.. How Many Times Have I Dropped The Ball?
Damn, Seems Like I'm Known Fa Lettin' My Peeps Down
& I'll Do Soda Just The Same With Henessy As I Let My Self-Esteem Drown
A Scratch of Ice
Random Spurts & A Blackened Mic Roasted From The Words I Scrap From Life
Cheeaaa.. Puffin On Green Clouds Thinkin' Bout Stuffin' Women From The Nile River
Got A Baby Last Time.. She Spars Like Her Daddy Knockin' Out Kidney Pieces & Jaw-Droppin' Livers
A Fetus That Evolved I'm Appalled Mah Daughter's Born A Swimmer
Can You Save A Life Tryna Make A Way Ta Christ Drownin' in Hellish Ways Alike..Enlightened Sinner?
Prison..
Count The Years & Amounts Given, I'd Be Surprised if You Could Last That Long.. I'd Rather Wash Dishes
Fuck Pissin' in A Pot Cuz I Never Had A Pot Ta Piss in
I Was Raised Analytical & Steady Watched The Systems Plots
I Took The Ball & Never Took A Shot, I Was Too Scared in Hesitation.. The Ball Was Dropped
But This Time I Say I'll Give It All I've Got

boy yu better chill.. u better not comment on my shit after readin..

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I Can See I Have Alot of Work To Do Especially Nobody Commenting A Drop I Never Wrote. It Was "Freed From My Head"

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Bro Stop Doing That Color Shit Its Kil;ling Me.... But It Was Def Hot... Dope Drop With Emotion... Used Some Tight Word Play.. But Again not a fan of the font n color changes... I Had to hight light word in order to read them lmao

A Scratch of Ice
Random Spurts & A Blackened Mic Roasted From The Words I Scrap From Life

Sounds Real

Chill Lemme Do My Own Thing, I'm Livin' in A Box & Gotta Beat My Own Spring
Were Toe Ta Toe Square Dancin' On Cubic Ft. As Our Blows Ring
My Limbs Wobble As The Tide Waves My Ankles Sleepin' in The Ocean
Slight Dreams Snap Out of It.. Counterfeit? Nah I'll Just Counter it,
Pitchin' Fast Ones Off The Mound After Tobbaco-Chews & County Spits
Reach Out A Bit.. If Anyone Grabs My Hand.. I Might Be Able 2 Get Out of It
Shit.. How Many Times Have I Dropped The Ball?

Thats HOT Shuuuunnnnnn!

I Would Like To See More Writtens From U.... U Got Some Skill Dude..And Tranferring That To Audio...? Pffttt U Gon Do Some Damage Kid... Keep Droppin Tho.. Give People Somethign To Work Against!

I Can't Believe It, This Year I Fell A Numerous Amount of Times
Shits Dubious Thee Way The Charge Has Been Declined, I Say This State of Mind.. Pathetic
I Play Jon B. Cool Relax & Seek A Medic, Speech Verbs Are Known 2 Determine The Outcome
I Speak Prophetic
Chill Lemme Do My Own Thing, I'm Livin' in A Box & Gotta Beat My Own Spring

[Nice wordplay, I liked this the first time I read it a couple days ago]

Were Toe Ta Toe Square Dancin' On Cubic Ft. As Our Blows Ring
My Limbs Wobble As The Tide Waves My Ankles Sleepin' in The Ocean
Slight Dreams Snap Out of It.. Counterfeit? Nah I'll Just Counter it,
Pitchin' Fast Ones Off The Mound After Tobbaco-Chews & County Spits
Reach Out A Bit.. If Anyone Grabs My Hand.. I Might Be Able 2 Get Out of It
Shit.. How Many Times Have I Dropped The Ball?
Damn, Seems Like I'm Known Fa Lettin' My Peeps Down
& I'll Do Soda Just The Same With Henessy As I Let My Self-Esteem Drown

[Good descriptive lyrics]

A Scratch of Ice
Random Spurts & A Blackened Mic Roasted From The Words I Scrap From Life
Cheeaaa.. Puffin On Green Clouds Thinkin' Bout Stuffin' Women From The Nile River
Got A Baby Last Time.. She Spars Like Her Daddy Knockin' Out Kidney Pieces & Jaw-Droppin' Livers
A Fetus That Evolved I'm Appalled Mah Daughter's Born A Swimmer
Can You Save A Life Tryna Make A Way Ta Christ Drownin' in Hellish Ways Alike..Enlightened Sinner?
Prison..

[The most thought provoking lines of the piece]

Count The Years & Amounts Given, I'd Be Surprised if You Could Last That Long.. I'd Rather Wash Dishes

[Nice]

Fuck Pissin' in A Pot Cuz I Never Had A Pot Ta Piss in
I Was Raised Analytical & Steady Watched The Systems Plots
I Took The Ball & Never Took A Shot, I Was Too Scared in Hesitation.. The Ball Was Dropped

[Not great rhyming again, and I'm going to keep getting on you for that, but that's a good concept]

But This Time I Say I'll Give It All I've Got

[Great finisher]

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Overall. I'd say this is one of my favorite pieces from you, in a while, though I don't think it comes close to your true potential and when you stop trying to differentiate yourself via a style and do it through rhymes. Watch out. Though, that's the natural cycle that people go through while they attempt to find themselves lyrically.

...pff and u say MY text is hard to read.... jigga please!