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Im Slittin ya Wrist, call you a faggot, then call you a bitch
i come from the hardest part of the metropolis
use a glock to spit, nah, i don't play, i murder on the daily-day
I was born in the bay, lived by the bay, I was raised as crazed
enraged with rages, blades were sacred, I played with razors
not like the emo chicks, I also played with grenades and bombs
made a song when I was young and said I'd lay them on the white house lawn
I was young and foolish, too young to do this, dumb and stupid
now I run this movement, something that none of you will ever do kid
drank lighter fluid, i've always been a strange man, ranging
from hanoous acts of violence to famous raps, that explains this wrath of silence
in fact a tyrant, a lyrical, miracle, spiritual force, in course with the fact
that I'm sporting a million dollar jacket like Clint Eastwood, I think hood
but live wealthy, you can't help me from myself I'm selfish, unhealthy
and about to be out of this bitch like wifey, so fuck you all, bite me

is this site dead, or do you need to be known to get some feed back?

lol yer i feal tah same waii with me vs jusick FEEDBACK PEOPLE yea man it wasnt bad keep at it!

it was pretty good...specially for someone jst showin up n dropping a bunch of verses...some of the stuff u wrote reminds me of alotta da shit i used to write about back in da day....i give this a 8/10 keep it up...i see lots of potential


n lately people havent been doin much of shit at all on here...jst give it some time tho...even i baerly get ne feedback on my shit...lol

Much Appreciated on all the FeedBack!
Thanx Yall!!!

~GHOST~

Yah this was straight. I liked the flow.
The scheme was pretty intricate.
And compound. Maybe a few to many
syllables in some spots. Vocabulary was
nice. Overall this was pretty cool. And
I want to see more.

Sorry I've had huge problems recently. Or you'd at least have my feedback on all your drops.

UPpin This For Some Elaborate feedback.

This was pretty pretty good for a keystyle , if it really was a keystyle that is.

It was alright man.I just feel you need to work on topics or along the lines of a theme. Other than that it wasn't bad keep up the work and keep enhancing.

thanx for the feedback yall!

i havn't been reading much of the verses dropped in writtens but i decided to randomly pick one i havn't read.. so i read this.. and it was pretty good.. 8/10

yea same here, i dont go in written section much

but yea im feelin this verse, nice rhymes, few nice punches there, like the "ali" one and christopher reeves line

i know whatcha mean about lack of feedback, usually i get like, one comment from complexity and thats it lol