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going off the deep end again folks
swim in ink pools with pen strokes
its impulse for me you see i'm on a higher level
evil my souls goal is to retire devils
the fire settles but im an inferno on the mic
you rankin me? im a colonel you a stripe
theres no fight game over you out of lives
I pound the proud leave um wit out an ounce of pride
You pout I ride wrong but I doubt your right
I’m over your head so you can call me the roof
Call me the truth you were just falsely accused
You sob and excuse your self in a gods presence
Not holy but I’m solely auth-en-tic
Im raw get it? Eddie murphey I Stretch leathers
Rappers bust sentences but only stretch letters
You pets feathers while I tip the scale
bitch rappers call them selves doggs they lick at tails
your buckets empty but you say your sick of pales(white haters lol)

thats all for now uppin

going off the deep end again folks
swim in ink pools with pen strokes

This is a great bar to kick it off with... good stuff there, especially the second line

As for the rest..i would quote but theyd be lines... or groups of three.. the way u transition with using ur rhyming words at the end or beggining of separate bars is interesting... i must say i have found myself doing that as well and figured it was a lack of being able to fit it in structure. This flowed well too me however and i think would sound right if u were to spit it on a freestyle or recording of sorts.