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hope u like it Viral i hope this is better lol get at me

ay yo

u need to realize these are real eyes with real lies
as i strike, rest assure i'll steal ur life
like death when he "steals life"
theres no cost for a humans life
but pretty soon his toes will be "tagged"
cause if it involves money
gangs will "inflate" as they see the price raise
like an auction u'll be appraised
the games a maze
but when i spray this lyrical mase
i leave em all amazed
like the movie dazed and confused
reverse it the other way
and ur still confused and dazed
i'll leave u dudes bruised and abrased
lacerate ur crews within days
and slice u in ways
when the destruction hits
i'll leave the deceased
there to lay
shit
u couldn't throw more licks if u stuck out ur tounge
so i'ma help ur album sales,
i'll re-do all ur songs in "tounges"
decrease the population like a suburban home
cause if u fuck with Lawgix
my Suburban won't be at home
ay yo
this pieper-picked-the-pepper
u piped-off-the mouth and got-peppered
like i sneezed to pepper-this-heffer
cause the spray hit ur torso
and the stray bullets peppered-ur-pecker
i wrecked ya
admit it
off to the psych ward to be admitted
cause i "admitted" to the crime
and the punishment was life sentence
but fuck it
i'm out on bail
thanks to the bailiff i "bailed"
people screamin hey to me
like if i was hay bein "bailed"

this shit was tight man, look forward to doin more collabs wit ya homie, 1LUV

thanx man appreciate ghost, still waitin to see what other people think *waits*

yeah i liked dis one alot better...some parts tho seemed to kinda jst be put in there and really didnt rhyme or make too much sense..but other than that dat was a good verse from u...keep it up...n like i said if u need help...jst ask

aight thanx man i tried to make it flow as much as i could, lookin back on it it was kinda dull in some places, but um heres my addy man [email protected]. if ya wanna add me.

peace

Yer some bits wernt that flash Hot buh oh well tahts happens 2 everbody Overall it was good.!

Wasn't bad

thanx

Worth the read man. Not excellent. Some of the attempted wordplay could have been worded better. But you'll get it. Nice Job 7.9/10

thanx man appreciate the feedback. i'll work on it for sure