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Today

Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 10:51 am
by FlipSide
Exchange Faith For Change Like When I help Bums
Replece Age With Play's made Ta Innovate Songs
Displace Hate With Strokes Before The Page Turns
Ta Give Hope Ta Those B4 They Come Of Age Sons
Bats N Chains, The Streets Of Rage Wit Education
Relief Ta C Ya Cage Imprisioned,
::Ur In The Sysytem::

Aiight

Inscriptions on a page a mirror with no reflection
I study My Complexion,N Da Exposures In Contention
::Im Ill With It in scripts I Get Sick Like Hamlet::
With A Twist In A Spit Like I Aint Done Wit A Drink
An Icon Like Da Sphinx, Advancement Is Ignorant
If U Forget Ya First Steps Ur Lost Since Ya Origin
Im Bored Of Men N They Egotistical Word Of nonsence
Its Metaphisical Tolerance Is They Lyrical Sustenance
Its Ok Ta Sence That They Mental Capacity Is Starvin
Ill Feed Like My Cranial Cavity's In need of Enlargement
Lable Me That Cuz For Less I Guess i Aint Co-Signing
Ill Let U Ride Kid But Ya Percentage Is Dat Of Bad Credit
Smash Critics With Bad Writtens, Like Books On Da O List
Fuck Crossing The Borders Im Traffickin Like Mexicans
Born Again Ta Learn Legit like English As A Second Language
Ya Missed Da Connection?, u not On My Bandwith
U Christened The Blessing But U lackin The Language
What To Make Of The Guessing.. Dat You Missing in action
Fuck Killing the Track If Its Dead Before im Done Stabbin
A lil key

Re: Today

Posted: Thu Jul 15, 2010 3:28 pm
by eMCee Havic
sick shit dogg weird way to structure it but i picked up the flow i like the opener alot great lines, flow fell off in the end but thats common with this type of tricky flow happens to me a lot. but overall it was good great though process though man \stay up

Re: Today

Posted: Fri Jul 16, 2010 12:46 am
by NoVeL
BEST QUOTE BY FAR
Exchange Faith For Change Like When I help Bums
Replece Age With Play's made Ta Innovate Songs
Displace Hate With Strokes Before The Page Turns
Ta Give Hope Ta Those B4 They Come Of Age Sons
Bats N Chains, The Streets Of Rage Wit Education
Relief Ta C Ya Cage Imprisioned,
::Ur In The System::
ILL SHIT DUDE

Re: Today

Posted: Sat Jul 17, 2010 12:43 am
by FlipSide
Word...thanks for the bash toyh.. it helps a lot to see where ur flaws are at when pointed out by another person.. Maybe i should start putting the beats i write my writtens with on them to give a lil insight.. and i Have been dropping off on structure in order to make it sound right... it seems to be a line i cant help crossing with out sacrificing either the way i should write or the way i should spit...Hmmmmmm.... ok well im going to put some work into the collab and hopefully drop a nice polished verse... Again i appreciate all the feed given and will return the favor...

Re: Today

Posted: Mon Jul 19, 2010 8:02 am
by QwarterZ
This was purdy cool with the whole key thing
the vibe was cool, looks like your expanding your mind
your vocab is picking up aswell, your flow was awkward
it kinda had me going then I was like what?
either way this piece was purdy dope man, nice lil key
not to complex, but not to simple, nice write!!!!!!!!!