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I did the verses, Tash was on the chorus. This was one of my first songs and I'm new at this so all feed would be appreciated.


http://usershare.net/763e5vme2win

first off the beat is fire, can you pm me the beat i'd like to do something on this much thanks if you can, the quality was good shit, the lyrics were nice had a good flow to it, a couple parts were off but you got it back, the chorus needs turning down a lil bit wasnt bad though i was feelin it, the song as a whole was dope though man, for a first track it's dope keep dropping this shit, just get at me about that beat cause that is fire aswell

Thanks for the feed

shit yo i was really feelings this, dunno if its cuz im drunk but this track is great lol. if this was one of ur first tracks then i gotta give it up to ya, you got great potential. keep at it yo, maybe we can collab sometime

Thanks for the feed, and word pm me anytime, I'll collab with anyone.

thanks for the feed

this shit is tight, great job for one of your first joints. keep up the work lookin forward to seein more

It's definitely a very good first song. I'd say tighten up those rhymes a bit, and also tighten up that flow.. you fall off at a couple places. All of that comes with practice though. I like the chorus.. It just needs to have more of a presence. Get your boy to re-record it a few times, and you'll eventually get that shit right. But good first track. Look forward to hearing more.

this is okay i hear a lot of problems with it... honestly i think the last verse was the best... you need to line up ur dubs better maybe try some stabs in ur dubs... there was not a lot of emotion in this either... so i'd like to hear some emotion in ur voice when ur sayin that ur better than everyone in a monotoned voice... like ur not meaning it... the listener won't take u serious... but this track was dope lyrically can't agree with liking the hook... it sounded like it was wrote in a short amount of time... but overall i'll give this a 7/10 thats with the mixing n mastering cuz that shit was pretty good... who ever is mixing ur vocals r doin a pretty good job of it...

Thanks for the feed, and I mixed my vocals

Thanks man