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Stay Real!
Posted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 9:00 pm
by MesaR
Stay Real too the things you write dont go downhill and defainlty dont bite//
anyone can Flow blow from vents to vents SPittin Not your best Lossen upp dont be tense//
Breath in and out Words will come too ur head and eventually outta ya mouth and into the pen //
Take ya time flow at Your Own pase Dont worry what people say no one can take your place//
anit rappin to your very best take it simple and lighter and the darkness will Eventaully Get brighter//
Everyone Needs to get back too planet Earth All The rappers THinkin More Then there worth //
These People thinkin that they cant loose its pritty hard 2 loose when u rap about shoes //
This Goes Out too Everyone keepin it Real Stay the same Never change Never switch Lanes Stay Real IMporve On what YOu lack Keep it smooth but never go wack // !!!!
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 12:33 am
by Viral
it was pretty straight.....every line rhymed and every line was different...ur very last line was the best i think...keep it up
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 8:22 am
by MesaR
thanks more feedback!
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 8:41 am
by complexity
Yah I liked it. The lines were to long though. There is a scientific study to back this theory up. Though I can't quote it.
I like the whole concept of stay real. And enjoyed reading this.
8/10
Keep it up..i mean...
Keep it real!
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 12:30 pm
by Invincible
It was all country fried steak gravy until you messed it up with the shoe and wack line. Other than that it wasn't bad.
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 12:52 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
i liked this, but i think if you broke ya lines down into bars, ya rhymes and lines would hit harder and make more sence, well at least be seen more clearly like:::
These People thinkin that they cant loose,
Well its pritty hard 2 loose when u rap about shoes //
jus my opinion, ya wrods are tight though!!!
~GHOST~
Posted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 3:40 pm
by MesaR
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