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Ima Man who lifts Hands for the Cause,
I stand alone no Plans for Applause,
A Bandit Branded at Birth in the Land of the Cursed,
In the Shadows I Lurk till im cursed in the Back of a Hurst,
I Fight for the Belief, that Rhymings a Relief,
Life is the Beat, your Mind is the Beef, Minus the Heat,
The Earth Spins, spittin storms wit the Worst Wins,
Im jussa Person Workin on becoming a Soldier witta Purpose,
No need to be Deservin of Credit, jus Serve it and Never Regret It,
Jus Remember you Said It, Let It go and Let Em' Respect It,
If not its wasn't Ever Expected, hatin! Its Better Neglected,
Patience! Jus know in ya Head its Perfection and the Present is Never Protected,
No Meanin to Life, Im Steamin in Strife, wit my inner Demons in Sight,
Seein Insight, fightin for the Freedom to Write, beggin and pleedin Im Bleedin thru Rights,
Its right Im Left In the Cold, Obsessed wit bein Blessed wit the Flow,
Foldin Shoulders get Compressed then Explode, Effectin the Globe,
My Brain Waves, stay to Blaze Rage, its a Plain Haze, to see thru the Displayed Maze,
Its Hay Day when it Rains Pain, makin it hard to Maintain a state of focus on the Game Played,
Emotionally my Poetry is still ill and distilled in my Souls Belief,
So I Know to Be Vocally, Im Notably So Decieved Overly since I was in Ovaries,
Its Disorderly gotten to the Point of the Brink, outta control, No Noise when I Think,
Its feels like I fill a Void when I Drink, your voice of choice can get Destroyed ina Blink,
I work for a check then Spend it on Bills, Im ill ona mic but im always Defendin my Skill,
Wit Guilt I Surrender my Will, but Never I Will, till I render to the Heavens we've Built.....

~GHOST~
aka Spiritual Brutality

Nice..

thanx man

nice drop man, keep it up

thanx for the props yall

well i expected alot more from the topic's title lol.. but overall it was decent.. i liked the intro the most

yea this was a good drop, the rhymescheme was real nice in certain spots, and lines were deep, the flow of this sorta struck me as like, a spoken word verse, good job

Yah Man. I personally think this was more then decent.

I work for a check then Spend it on Bills, Im ill ona mic but im always Defendin my Skill,


great lines like that kept me interested.

thanx for the props yall, ill take any type of criticism you can give, big UPs...

Ima Man who lifts Hands for the Cause,
I stand alone no Plans for Applause,

My Brain Waves, stay to Blaze Rage, its a Plain Haze, to see thru the Displayed Maze,
Its Hay Day when it Rains Pain, makin it hard to Maintain a state of focus on the Game Played,

Emotionally my Poetry is still ill and distilled in my Souls Belief,
So I Know to Be Vocally, Im Notably So Decieved Overly since I was in Ovaries,

^favorite lines

solid drop. from the couples lines you dropped in the 'diss the mc above you cypher' i was expecting much less. But it was tight. Good flow, nice use of multis. Some of the bars were streched out, so it might not convert into audio well. But yeah, nice drop, good read. I enjoy shit thats not ballin rap all the time.

word

thanx yall....

found this one lingerin

besides repeating a few words this was a nice piece, work on your structure too, bars don't have to be the same length but it helps alot flowise if their close to the same length