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Climbing up a mountain where no one can find me
no one can buy me another drink, no it's not likely
I'll be coming back
more then likely I'll be running back, catch the pass
in my hand, my mind replays the touchdown, wretched past
I keep connecting facts
seconds tick, and the clock moves quicker, lights flicker
hit with amnesia, convulsions cause me to spew innards
till I can't remember it
regretting the night before, and the enjoyment of today
to take it all back, is when the whole deployment complains
a set of lights explore....
they check to see if I'm still alive, if I'm still kicking
I feel sickened, at the same time I feel like the real victim
deep down I ain't feeling right
like they say you got it under control man, no worries bruh
when you worry it worries us, how are you gonna bury us!?!
why I gotta try to uphold fam?
I can feel a souls hand reach over, saying it's okay...it's okay
can it be I'm just hallucinating, or am I just in a thick bouquet
she threw me away and never looked back
I took her life that night, wrecked both of us and could've cracked
I can't tell no more, but as long as I'm running I'm never looking back

This piece had more of a lifestyle feel to me with less sick vocab but more direction and purpose then your other piece

The flow came in nice with the two lines then one short

There were some lines i was definitley feelin