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Posted: **Mon Oct 02, 2006 11:34 am**

an eight year veteran, don't make mistakes like other men,
flow is gutta-and..cold-chokes these folks that im-better-than..
this is the lions-den...for experienced emcees,
that'll rip apart ya crass-rap with no bite, but more bark then-trees..
no sparkin heat..just an educated-analysis,
packin spits that'll have these kids..recognize im not aver-age..
you passin this?...its highly-unlikely,...but i will smile niceley,
then brow-beat ya rhymin and leave ya blind-man, when-i-speak..
i dont ride-&-chief..im to old...i keep my mind on the goal,
i am to cold, i touch one-booth, and nine-mics get froze..
eyein-the-gold...im leavin the path bare when they hearin me rap: scared,
most sellin-a-act cause when they-spit, its like they hearin-impaired..
only hearin? ya half-there...pay attention to the content,
most is nonsense. half-hearted herbshit, how is it sponsored?..
how am i not-a-hit?..how is talent so overlooked?,
valiantly spit a-book..of lyrics, but most are sold-on-a-hook..
the craft has upped-&-booked...only underground can save rap,
breakin cds: take-that, you fake industry made-cats..
you parade-crap..and expect us to believe that you made-it?..
the industry is elementary..so how is it that u famous while i stay underrated...?

Posted: **Mon Oct 02, 2006 12:22 pm**

It's a work of art.

Posted: **Tue Oct 03, 2006 3:41 am**

UP...come on...feedback...

Posted: **Tue Oct 03, 2006 4:45 am**

i liked it..i think its the first written ive read from u...most likely the first one u dropped cuz i dont remember ne other ones...keep it up tho it was pretty dope 9.2/10

Posted: **Tue Oct 03, 2006 6:58 am**

i like the precise-ness of your 9.2. but yeah, first anything ive really dropped on here beside the onelines in the cypher.

appreciate the feed.

UP

Posted: **Tue Oct 03, 2006 3:47 pm**

8th wrote:i like the precise-ness of your 9.2. but yeah, first anything ive really dropped on here beside the onelines in the cypher.

appreciate the feed.

UP

FO SHO!!...lol

Posted: **Tue Oct 03, 2006 6:55 pm**

I bring the presence of a God when I step in a room/
and every rhyme's a clean sweep and I don't even use a broom/
it's punchline after punchline evertime I'm up to bat/
i keep my wallet like Oprah Winfrey, sumthin next to fat/
i eat fake emcees for breakfast and shit 'em out by dinner time/
my mouth shoots off so much that they starting to call me Columbine/
i'm the leader of my squadd, so call me Christopher Columbus/
I push myself beyond the limits and not every emcee's done this/
this ain't a classroom, but I'll teach ya a lesson/
me without the rap-game is like the Smith without the Wesson/
similiar to the career of Clay Aiken, this shit's finally reached it's end/
and worry not mutha fuckas, cuz I'll definately write again.

"Meh...it's not the best shit I've ever written...but what can I say, I was bored. lol" -Kurse

Posted: **Tue Oct 03, 2006 7:41 pm**

it'd probably sound better on audio.. the intro was ok not big on multis..alot of questions with answers as if ur having a conversation with urself.. overall it wasn't so bad 7/10

Posted: **Wed Oct 04, 2006 2:51 am**

Kurse wrote:I bring the presence of a God when I step in a room/
and every rhyme's a clean sweep and I don't even use a broom/
it's punchline after punchline evertime I'm up to bat/
i keep my wallet like Oprah Winfrey, sumthin next to fat/
i eat fake emcees for breakfast and shit 'em out by dinner time/
my mouth shoots off so much that they starting to call me Columbine/
i'm the leader of my squadd, so call me Christopher Columbus/
I push myself beyond the limits and not every emcee's done this/
this ain't a classroom, but I'll teach ya a lesson/
me without the rap-game is like the Smith without the Wesson/
similiar to the career of Clay Aiken, this shit's finally reached it's end/
and worry not mutha fuckas, cuz I'll definately write again.

"Meh...it's not the best shit I've ever written...but what can I say, I was bored. lol" -Kurse

ya could posted that in ur own thread ya kno...lol..next time...next time

Posted: **Wed Oct 04, 2006 2:53 am**

8th if u got a mic u should definatley start recordin man...itd be alot better....for people to feel ur shit

Posted: **Wed Oct 04, 2006 3:44 am**

yeah i record...well i use to. when i get my new comp, ima start recording more. Whats ur aim? ill send u a couple songs.

Posted: **Wed Oct 04, 2006 4:14 am**

D1s3AsEdV1ruS...hit me up

Posted: **Wed Oct 04, 2006 4:59 am**

Hmm. This was dope as hell. The rhyme scheme was nice too. 9.0/10

Posted: **Sun Oct 08, 2006 3:26 am**

Nice verse kurse

I bring the presence of a God when I step in a room/
and every rhyme's a clean sweep and I don't even use a broom/

it's punchline after punchline evertime I'm up to bat/
i keep my wallet like Oprah Winfrey, sumthin next to fat/

clever

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