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Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2010 5:30 am
by Munteskue_lol
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Re: Happy Families

Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2010 5:48 am
by Kau the Lion
I like it. A little tweaking could tighten up the flow a bit. Keep it up.

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Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2010 6:00 am
by Munteskue_lol
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Re: Happy Families

Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2010 6:12 am
by AbZ The Beast
Stainless souls- just try to keep perfection alive
Destined to find another way to put the pep in our stride
nice
Convinced a Christian savior knows ways to calmly evince behavior

nice writing man..flow and content were solid..


**wish i was sitting by a pool* DAMNIT!

peace

ABZ

Re: Happy Families

Posted: Fri Aug 13, 2010 7:06 am
by FlipSide
Yo U Went Off With The Multies to Kick It Off Tho SOme Did fall Jus A Lil Short U Did Not Loose The Content.. i Like The Quick Drop.. ..The First Bar Was Hot Then u Forced Jus Like One Or Two Multies Tho The Flow Never Fell Too Much To Me..
And Yea Its Hot As Hells Basement Out Side