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crunch vs jack the strippa haha


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like workin for locksmith, i REQUIRE-YOU-THE-CHROME...U Aint known as a RIDER-TO-THE-ZONE
LIAR-YOU-ALONE, call'yaself jack-o-lantern when i put the FIRE-TO-YA-DOME...

i'ma FIGHTER-,YOU-A-CLONE. plus i'm only GUNNIN-ON-ONE-NINE.
jackrabbits are a prey to snakes, so u can say he's RUNNING-FROM-CRUNCHTIME

u gay so u aint COMING-ON-SUm-DIME,plus i'm STRONGER-THEN-YA-RACIST-FAGGIT-PUNK
jack wack, u been suckin LONGER-THEN-A-STATION-WAGON's-TRUNK...

i get more cash and spit cold raps, that'll mAKE-YA ACTUALLY-SNEEZE
your now JACK-FROST cause my flow MADE-YA-ACTUALLY FEEZE

better step and get ya HEAD-IN-THE-GAME, ur retarded but you'll get LESSON-EXPLAINED
bitch the only time u reloading a thing is when REFRESHING-YA-PAGE

Light work..

Aiigh...

I gotta fist clutchin' this herb in victory, you a bitch wit frees, sick punches burnin this kidd wit ease
When we list somethin' wit words & gifted peeps, I guarentee it's Natzi/Not C like discussin' German History

Nigga, quit fussin', & learn ya shit from me, I'll flip ya feet, it was not sain you took this fight
Even ya drops lame, I'll put it nice, it takes more than the dashes to be a Scott-James-Look-A-Like

When I cock,aim, ya shook wit life, so when ya brains is gravy, you can blame ya safety
You need to change ya name C, coz bitches wouldn't give a Peek-A-Chu, but that juss explains ya Avy

Anotha cartoon??? that's insain & crazy, are you deranged or lazy? punches mingle & dance wit ease
I'm not ya equal, ya man or peep, he gotta R.E. try and still lost, be lucky you gettin' a single chance wit me
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These people cant stand you C, Damn, dudes weak, I already knew this fuck wouldn't last
Don't press ya luck in tha match, coz he throwin' punches like the shoutbox archive, both are stuck in the past.

fugetit..

like workin for locksmith, i REQUIRE-YOU-THE-CHROME...U Aint known as a RIDER-TO-THE-ZONE
LIAR-YOU-ALONE, call'yaself jack-o-lantern when i put the FIRE-TO-YA-DOME...

Nice punch, but need a better setup.

i'ma FIGHTER-,YOU-A-CLONE. plus i'm only GUNNIN-ON-ONE-NINE.
jackrabbits are a prey to snakes, so u can say he's RUNNING-FROM-CRUNCHTIME

Good punch, nice wordplay and decent play on the name.

u gay so u aint COMING-ON-SUm-DIME,plus i'm STRONGER-THEN-YA-RACIST-FAGGIT-PUNK
jack wack, u been suckin LONGER-THEN-A-STATION-WAGON's-TRUNK...

Weak punch, bad delivery.

i get more cash and spit cold raps, that'll mAKE-YA ACTUALLY-SNEEZE
your now JACK-FROST cause my flow MADE-YA-ACTUALLY FEEZE

Decent enough line but the punch is too weak to be merited for a battle verse.

better step and get ya HEAD-IN-THE-GAME, ur retarded but you'll get LESSON-EXPLAINED
bitch the only time u reloading a thing is when REFRESHING-YA-PAGE

Good line, but not a hard enough punchline to be in a battle verse.

Jack:
I gotta fist clutchin' this herb in victory, you a bitch wit frees, sick punches burnin this kidd wit ease
When we list somethin' wit words & gifted peeps, I guarentee it's Natzi/Not C like discussin' German History

Good punch. Nice Nameplay and Wordplay and good set up. Not sure if you meant to set up the Nazi line with the "burnin" set up but it worked well regardless.

Nigga, quit fussin', & learn ya shit from me, I'll flip ya feet, it was not sain you took this fight
Even ya drops lame, I'll put it nice, it takes more than the dashes to be a Scott-James-Look-A-Like

Good personal, good punch.

When I cock,aim, ya shook wit life, so when ya brains is gravy, you can blame ya safety
You need to change ya name C, coz bitches wouldn't give a Peek-A-Chu, but that juss explains ya Avy

Nice personal, nameplay and wordplay.

Anotha cartoon??? that's insain & crazy, are you deranged or lazy? punches mingle & dance wit ease
I'm not ya equal, ya man or peep, he gotta R.E. try and still lost, be lucky you gettin' a single chance wit me
rugged-eros-crunch-time-vt17885.html

Hard punch and personal.

These people cant stand you C, Damn, dudes weak, I already knew this fuck wouldn't last
Don't press ya luck in tha match, coz he throwin' punches like the shoutbox archive, both are stuck in the past.

Good line but I think it's a weak finisher to an overall good battle verse.

Overall: Jack wins this battle, pretty much outshined Crunch across the board.

Crunchtime: You gotta get more personal and nasty with your lines. You have good concepts, for writtens, you gotta really start swinging in your battle verses though or you're gonna get swung on.

Would appreciate a vote from each of you in my battles. Thanks.

Breakdown...

Crunch's Verse
like workin for locksmith, i REQUIRE-YOU-THE-CHROME...U Aint known as a RIDER-TO-THE-ZONE
LIAR-YOU-ALONE, call'yaself jack-o-lantern when i put the FIRE-TO-YA-DOME...

This is what I'm talking about, Crunch. This is the stuff I like to see. First line couldve had better wordplay mixed with the punch, but for an opener, this delivers.

i'ma FIGHTER-,YOU-A-CLONE. plus i'm only GUNNIN-ON-ONE-NINE.
jackrabbits are a prey to snakes, so u can say he's RUNNING-FROM-CRUNCHTIME

Eh, this doesnt deliver the way I think you wanted it to, but the concept is there. Just missed the punch.

u gay so u aint COMING-ON-SUm-DIME,plus i'm STRONGER-THEN-YA-RACIST-FAGGIT-PUNK
jack wack, u been suckin LONGER-THEN-A-STATION-WAGON's-TRUNK...

This doesnt do it for me either bro. First line is filler, second line no punch.

i get more cash and spit cold raps, that'll mAKE-YA ACTUALLY-SNEEZE
your now JACK-FROST cause my flow MADE-YA-ACTUALLY FEEZE

Dude, this isnt what you should be going for. The wordplay is there, but thats it. The punch was weak IMO. Can flip the Jack Frost shit so much better.

better step and get ya HEAD-IN-THE-GAME, ur retarded but you'll get LESSON-EXPLAINED
bitch the only time u reloading a thing is when REFRESHING-YA-PAGE

Okay, I see the concept, but the punch would only hit hard for me if he was some kind of net gangster. Thats the type you want to apply these punches too. The refreshing is play, but in all its still the second best punch of your verse... Which only had two punches, but yeah, keep at it fammo.



Jack's Verse
I gotta fist clutchin' this herb in victory, you a bitch wit frees, sick punches burnin this kidd wit ease
When we list somethin' wit words & gifted peeps, I guarentee it's Natzi/Not C like discussin' German History

Flow is sick, punchline is tight, wordplay is there. Good solid opener. Crunch, takes notes.

Nigga, quit fussin', & learn ya shit from me, I'll flip ya feet, it was not sain you took this fight
Even ya drops lame, I'll put it nice, it takes more than the dashes to be a Scott-James-Look-A-Like

Lmfao, this was nice. I like how you delivered the line. I agree but throw dashes in my shit for newbies' sake. Anyhow, great punch.

When I cock,aim, ya shook wit life, so when ya brains is gravy, you can blame ya safety
You need to change ya name C, coz bitches wouldn't give a Peek-A-Chu, but that juss explains ya Avy

Aight this wasnt as hard IMO as the last two bars, but does get a little personal with the punch, which is always good to mix into a battle verse.

Anotha cartoon??? that's insain & crazy, are you deranged or lazy? punches mingle & dance wit ease
I'm not ya equal, ya man or peep, he gotta R.E. try and still lost, be lucky you gettin' a single chance wit me
rugged-eros-crunch-time-vt17885.html

This is a nice punch, gets personal, and the flow is still smooth.

These people cant stand you C, Damn, dudes weak, I already knew this fuck wouldn't last
Don't press ya luck in tha match, coz he throwin' punches like the shoutbox archive, both are stuck in the past.

Nice way to end it, but not as hard as I would expect, though I'm sure you knew that and wouldve delivered more proper in a close against someone else. Nice battle verse overall with a solid flow, good punches/wordplay, and digging it all in with the personals. Crunch, this is a battle verse.


Vote- Jack tha Rippa

like workin for locksmith, i REQUIRE-YOU-THE-CHROME...U Aint known as a RIDER-TO-THE-ZONE
LIAR-YOU-ALONE, call'yaself jack-o-lantern when i put the FIRE-TO-YA-DOME...

Decent punch and name flip. Could've been worded better to punch harder IMO. Flow was a little wonky.

i'ma FIGHTER-,YOU-A-CLONE. plus i'm only GUNNIN-ON-ONE-NINE.
jackrabbits are a prey to snakes, so u can say he's RUNNING-FROM-CRUNCHTIME

Weak punch. Flowed well, though. Multi was a'ight.

u gay so u aint COMING-ON-SUm-DIME,plus i'm STRONGER-THEN-YA-RACIST-FAGGIT-PUNK
jack wack, u been suckin LONGER-THEN-A-STATION-WAGON's-TRUNK...

Huh? I don't think this turned out the way you wanted it to.

i get more cash and spit cold raps, that'll mAKE-YA ACTUALLY-SNEEZE
your now JACK-FROST cause my flow MADE-YA-ACTUALLY FEEZE

Was NOT feeling this. At all. Multi was terrible.

better step and get ya HEAD-IN-THE-GAME, ur retarded but you'll get LESSON-EXPLAINED
bitch the only time u reloading a thing is when REFRESHING-YA-PAGE

Better than most of your previous bars. Had some wordplay and a pretty good multi. But as a closer this didn't do it.


Overall, Crunch, you just need to step it up in all departments.

I gotta fist clutchin' this herb in victory, you a bitch wit frees, sick punches burnin this kidd wit ease
When we list somethin' wit words & gifted peeps, I guarentee it's Natzi/Not C like discussin' German History

Sick wordplay. Flow was perfect. Multies, too. Great opener.

Nigga, quit fussin', & learn ya shit from me, I'll flip ya feet, it was not sain you took this fight
Even ya drops lame, I'll put it nice, it takes more than the dashes to be a Scott-James-Look-A-Like

And another.

When I cock,aim, ya shook wit life, so when ya brains is gravy, you can blame ya safety
You need to change ya name C, coz bitches wouldn't give a Peek-A-Chu, but that juss explains ya Avy

A little weaker than the previous bars, but still a good one.

Anotha cartoon??? that's insain & crazy, are you deranged or lazy? punches mingle & dance wit ease
I'm not ya equal, ya man or peep, he gotta R.E. try and still lost, be lucky you gettin' a single chance wit me

Nice personal. Everything else was there, too.

These people cant stand you C, Damn, dudes weak, I already knew this fuck wouldn't last
Don't press ya luck in tha match, coz he throwin' punches like the shoutbox archive, both are stuck in the past.

Nice closer.


Not much to say here. Didn't see any major flaws with Jack's verse.



I think you know how this goes.

+1 Jack

i was gonna vote on this but being its 3-0 KO, i wont elaborate... crunch, u got potential, keep trying..

jack, decent verse, good enough to take this W..

scottjames bar was IILLLLLL

v/ Jack

Catsweeep ... Jack



The last four voters quoted all the lines and explained the win ... pretty obvious... Vote JACK

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ok i lost update the battle, niggas making me look bad hahaha