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Shadow's Fading But Memory's Never Ending, Crying In Silence My Heart's Is Slowly Breaking
Thought's Devouring My Every Movement, I'm Silently Choking, Shaking I Cant Control This, There's No-more Hoping
Mind Crazy ,Gently Grazing Lost Memories, Life's In Piece's Allot Of People Hate Me, Feeling Like My Inside's Are Empty
Razor's By My Side, Tear's Staining My Face I'm Getting Tempted, Cant Live My Life Always Feeling Hated
Action's Replaying Over Again, Uncontrollable Thoughts Leaving Me Feeling Ashamed, Telling People They Not To Blame
Lying Lifeless Blood Pouring I Cant Stand The Pain, I Hate These Feeling's, I Just Want To Feel Happy Again
Straight Jackets Refraining Every Movment,Happy Memorie's So Far Passed I Wish That I Knew All Off Them
Try Living Like Me Tormented By Demons Feeling Like Your In The Lion's Den,Ripping Your Life To Shred's

Yo.....Welcome First n Foremost...this the first piece i read from u ...i think...it was descent.. lotta feeling in there.. kinda like some poetry.... i like it.. it woulda rally put more umph into it with some dope metaphores...structure n flow was a lil streched but over all good piece... looking foward to more drops...stay active

Yeah I Thought That Reading It Back Just BUT Im Still Learning So Any Tips Are Greatly Appreciated

Shadow's Fading But Memory's Never Ending, Crying In Silence My Heart's Is Slowly Breaking
Thought's Devouring My Every Movement, I'm Silently Choking, Shaking I Cant Control This, There's No-more Hoping

cool bro.


over all solid content alot of emotion alittle work on the structure and it would be dope