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Look into my eyes, kid,
You ain't seein' blindness...
I be dealin' in the rhyme biz
but I'm never gonna close my eyelids,
to disregard what the reality of the time is...
See, I'm bound to this papyrus
where I write what I see timeless,
spittin' rhythms that arise with
the intrinsic cadence of my mind's gift.
Cuz I'm feelin' what I pilot,
leavin' suckers sunk in silence,
cuz they can't comprehend how I live.
I ain't never gonna flow sumthin mindless
and that's why my every line hits,
cuz even if only I listen, I'll refine this...
So, now- look into my eyes if
you can see the silhouette a' all this
and can recognize the gem that I've polished
(to be continued)

leavin' suckers sunk in silence,
cuz they can't comprehend how I live.
I ain't never gonna flow sumthin mindless
and that's why my every line hits,
cuz even if only I listen, I'll refine this...
So, now- look into my eyes if
you can see the silhouette a' all this
and can recognize the gem that I've polished

dope...now finish it and go record

finally found a couple beats that would work well with both of us.i'm send'em when i get back 2 my home pc

abz

Nice Flow...Elementary Rhyme Scheme, not many transitions and u rhyme "This" too many times...Other than that i know u an audio cat so the scheme goes out the window... i read this and seemed to flow fluidly... nice drop brah

Damn Love That Flows Immense

to disregard what the reality of the time is...
See, I'm bound to this papyrus
where I write what I see timeless,
spittin' rhythms that arise with
the intrinsic cadence of my mind's gift

this part stuck out to me, the "minds gift" line was nice, great vocab and the usage of it was good as well. A solid rhythm and a good structure, everything seem pretty tight. some of the multis werent exactly syllable pristine but to be honest im not even as anal about that shit any more.

return the feed on my "Old battle topic" when you get the chance, id appreciate it.

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