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Check. When the due date?

Like I said in the PM I sent you, let me know when you wanna drop (give me a lil' time ahead though so I can do my verse)

***EDIT... F it- Due later on today/early night That ok with you?? PM me.

lets drop soon or close this out. I'll do somethin up later so it don't really matter when it do. Lets juss do it already.

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<--Felt like it.

*I'm a Jerk! Kick'em in the groin n' make'em unisex able
Punch Line king? Only if you fisted Coce on the table
must've been KNOCKED OUT on them losses cause ya sigs wrong (sig)
Ur Like toilette water its inevitable ur gettin shytted on
Rip the who? ya points dull n short like a thumb tack
Beat'em with a 2 by 4- no axe notice I'ma Lumber Jack

left hand on his chest, right punchin his nervous system into lungs
cause him beatin me's like piss on a toilette seat in a house of Nuns

...Catch ya next time.

hmm

Aiight..

This nigga can't phase Rip wit stable flows, make a note, I aim shit to lay a blow
So face it, labels know, that nobodies gon' "Mention Fuck" like Basic Cable Shows

I rape kids thats stayin' close, even ya names a joke so we know ya worlds shit
& fuck tha race stuff if it ever came up, but I Betty White and not the Golden Girls bitch

nobodies known to hurt Rip, I aint concerned kidd when I terrorize & chase clowns
& I don't care or try to hate now but I aint feelin' fuck like bein' paralized from the waiste down

Damnnnn Jacks a beast, massive heat that left you waitin' n cracked
Ya text too basic & whack, coz Fuck aint a problem, they got medication for that

ovah..

can i vote on this not that I need to... cat sweep

*I'm a Jerk! Kick'em in the groin n' make'em unisex able
Punch Line king? Only if you fisted Coce on the table

It was like halfway there but worded totally weird.2/5

must've been KNOCKED OUT on them losses cause ya sigs wrong (sig)
Ur Like toilette water its inevitable ur gettin shytted on

Went for a decent personal but followed it up with played punch. 2/5

Rip the who? ya points dull n short like a thumb tack
Beat'em with a 2 by 4- no axe notice I'ma Lumber Jack

Semi creative wordplay here. 3/5

left hand on his chest, right punchin his nervous system into lungs
cause him beatin me's like piss on a toilette seat in a house of Nuns

The punch was weak and the rhyme was even weaker. This definitely didn't work as a closer. 1/5


Your verse had potential but was poorly executed. Try and think of ways you can word you punches to make them most effective. 8/20

This nigga can't phase Rip wit stable flows, make a note, I aim shit to lay a blow
So face it, labels know, that nobodies gon' "Mention Fuck" like Basic Cable Shows

First line was filler but ended with a nice nameflip. 3/5

I rape kids thats stayin' close, even ya names a joke so we know ya worlds shit
& fuck tha race stuff if it ever came up, but I Betty White and not the Golden Girls bitch

A nice punch but a bit universal. 3/5

nobodies known to hurt Rip, I aint concerned kidd when I terrorize & chase clowns
& I don't care or try to hate now but I aint feelin' fuck like bein' paralized from the waiste down

Filler again but a nasty name flip. 4/5

Damnnnn Jacks a beast, massive heat that left you waitin' n cracked
Ya text too basic & whack, coz Fuck aint a problem, they got medication for that

Decent. Not one of your best. 3/5


Not one of the best verses I've seen from Jack but enough to take this battle. 13/20



+1 Jack Da Rippa

thx 4 the breakdown.

ill get at this later, look like a good battle though

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id like to know how the fuck this dude record is 24 and 0 when he spittin shit like that

i mean no disrespect but foreal

Pshhhhh...I'd prolly fuck with tha dopest nigga if I was new too. Get da fuck outta my thread rookie.

man dont get it twisted because im a new dude to this board. dont mean im new to the fuckin rhyme game. and with those weak bars id murk you anytime.

best bar by fuck

"*I'm a Jerk! Kick'em in the groin n' make'em unisex able
Punch Line king? Only if you fisted Coce on the table"

the rhymescheme was missing, the concept was good however


best bar by jack

"This nigga can't phase Rip wit stable flows, make a note, I aim shit to lay a blow
So face it, labels know, that nobodies gon' "Mention Fuck" like Basic Cable Shows"

this whole bar had nothing but forced filler to reach that punch's rhymescheme, but its more rhymescheme than fuck had, and the punchline itself was nice




overall jack easily won this, his punches connected better and his flow was for the most part on point,

vote:jack

Knowmad wrote:can i vote on this not that I need to... cat sweep

u can vote but if u want this to actually count then break it down...

and i agree with TOYH