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Written to Slaughterhouse "Not Tonight"

I ain't mad, I'm just not happy camper
My niggas in the crew always say I'm sick so they call a dude "Ancer"
That's a mix between aids and cancer
And I'll murder anyone that's not a bystander
Now I'mma make em all pay attention
I was told I couldn't do it all, I'mma try to get in contention
But when it all falls down, I want to know
Class has already begun, I'm just tutoring hoes
So they can learn to listen and feign this heroine flow
The kind from the desert, that harrowing dope
But hoes wanna role up like they the heroine so...
I lay they ass down that's how the heroine work.
Shit, was that a triple-entendre
Damn I'm honored
I flip words, not birds your honor
And that's a double for you, I swear I'm bomber
From long range, lens frames can't spot me
Now I understand why Drizzy couldn't meet em in the lobby
It took awhile but my words were called a gift
So I got a blog and a twitter and started this shit
Come in, come in, come again if you leaving
I promise to bless you all even when you're not sneezing.

this was a little better imo. then your latest piece, however you definitely gotta up your rhymescheme, besides that it was a cool read

Lol I liked this for some odd reason, there was a lot of babbling and repetition but it all had a light-hearted vibe to it. Stand out line for me was the 'I flip words' one, but in a drop like this u should squeeze in a few more quotables and punches so ur reader keeps interested. Good though u got potential, keep droppin.

Hey thanks for the comments, I'm trying to work on getting the words to fit the music. Currently when I record it comes out Souljah Boy-like...like I wrote the words then tried to put music to it. Anywho bare with me.