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Took a little bit more time with this version...although I recorded it faster. Smdh. Sorry it wasn't longer, as you can tell Drake comes in and then the rest of the loop sucks. So I had to split it into two parts.

Written to Kanye West "All of the Lights (Ghetto University)

I'm curious as to how the hell did you think you'd see me,
These Helen Keller niggas, trying to talk as if they'd beat me
What I'mma do is write certain verse
and then kill it, to show how little energy I exert
Once I flex my left brain...forfeit the game
If you have noticed, I'm a wild card draw down
And only jaw-broken dudes thought I'd exit first round
Manny Pacquio, pound-for-pound sound
You've never heard of me? I didn't come from underground
I've been right here the whole time
Actually I've been struggling to ascend, a slow climb
Ask anyone a story that know mine,
I guarantee if you not on short time, its one of a kind

Ehhh not really feelin this man....I liked your explanation more then what you wrote atleast theres hope for it being a tight verse but it didnt turn out that way....sadly

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yeah man this was all off. this beat was crap first of all, it didnt leave you any room to really get your flow on. it just sounded like you were reading some raps with a beat in the background. just work on tightening up your flow man and writing to beats. work on trying to be smooth with it instead of sounding like you are reading off the page. keep doin ya thing though man and elevate. holla