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I can see in2 ur future, somethin like Nostradamus,
It don't look good 4 ya, with Doggz bringin u so much dramas,
I'm tryin to be raps new ruler, by makin u all my followers,
Doggz is soundin cooler, than all these other rappers....

I don't float like a butterfly, nor sting like a bee,
So go ahead if u wanna try, u'll find i'm tha greatest like Ali,
I'm not ur average type guy, ur gonna need ur crew to get rid of me.
I can make u and them cry, provin u could neva be an emcee....

Rock up to ur show, rip tha mike out ya hand,
Spit out tha coolest flow, I'll have em callin me the air con man,
It's all systems go, I'm takin all of ur f@ckin fans,
Seriously forget it bro, U neva had a f@ckin chance.....

U've reached tha final frontier, and this ain't star trek,
Its tha end of ur career, and it hasn't even started yet,
So let me make somethin clear, rappin is somethin u need to 4get,
Doggz likes to keep u livin in fear, thats how I earn my respect.....

I can see in2 ur future, somethin like Nostradamus,
It don't look good 4 ya, with Doggz bringin u so much dramas,
I'm tryin to be raps new ruler, by makin u all my followers,
Doggz is soundin cooler, than all these other rappers....

Followers & rappers, went with what?. Like how you started it.

I don't float like a butterfly, nor sting like a bee,
So go ahead if u wanna try, u'll find i'm tha greatest like Ali,
I'm not ur average type guy, ur gonna need ur crew to get rid of me.
I can make u and them cry, provin u could neva be an emcee....

Try stay away from overused lines like the bee,

Rock up to ur show, rip tha mike out ya hand,
Spit out tha coolest flow, I'll have em callin me the air con man,

ok.. Again I see where you're going, but try n stay away from this.

It's all systems go, I'm takin all of ur f@ckin fans,
Seriously forget it bro, U neva had a f@ckin chance.....


Good way 2 Follow it up though.

U've reached tha final frontier, and this ain't star trek,
Its tha end of ur career, and it hasn't even started yet,

ok..

So let me make somethin clear, rappin is somethin u need to 4get,
Doggz likes to keep u livin in fear, thats how I earn my respect.....

This was cool.


Overall you need a lot of work but potential is there.
Just stay away from overused concepts & weave ya lines together better.

decent drop. Keep It Up.

I HATE Tha Word LIKE
It Limits Your Bars Sooooo Much.
If Possible Please Refrain From Using The Word Like Unless You Really Have To.
Also Shorten Your Bars A Bit, It Sticks Out To The Reader Better.

Just My Key Advice, Here's My Example
I Would Have Said

I don't float like a butterfly, nor sting like a bee,
So go ahead if u wanna try, u'll find i'm tha greatest like Ali,
I'm not ur average type guy, ur gonna need ur crew to get rid of me.
I can make u and them cry, provin u could neva be an emcee....

I don't float like a butterfly, nor sting like a bee,
So go ahead if u wanna try, I'm tha greatest Ali,
not ur average type guy, gonna need ur crew to get rid of me.
I can make u cry, provin u could neva be an emcee....

Thanx fellas....all tha feedback is appreciated and helps one grow and i'll try my best to do that....peace out.