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Once again this was a freestyle that I converted to text and edited. At some points the flow is hard to catch but that's just cuz the delivery switches every now and then. I'm gotten into using limericks more often so be on the look out for that too.

Verse 1:
On the mic I'm cold that's right
I got a flow like frozen ice
I'm composing wild notions
then recording every line, cuz its bout time
i get the recognition I deserve right now
I've murdered every verse you've heard and never let you down
why'd you act like I ain't kill it
and you say I'm not the illest
Everytime I'm in the building
yall just say that yall don't feel it
but I'm grinding when I'm living
and I'm trying when I'm spittin
I've had practice making classics
now I'm rhyming every sentence
what I'm doing isn't for me, it's a gift I give to you
so that maybe one day you'll acknowledge what I've spit as true
When I rap it's like a crack attack
addicted to the track in fact
the beat is what I need
or else I'll flip out like an acrobat
all because the music it inspires me to write
and I wanna share the passion for rappin I have inside
but no. will you listen? you're dismissin every sentence
every written image I've invented you just end up missin

Verse 2:
It's an arsenic fueled volcano, that resides inside my thoughts
and these fools just call me Kano* cuz I'm prying at their hearts
every lyric's like a spear, it clearly pierces every mark
I'll have you frozen in my flow, you know the water's very dark
you're leagues beneath me, you can't beat me
you defeat me? must be dreaming
everybody knows my flow's much colder than the winter season
much more clever than whoever I'll give you a million reasons
I'm frying would (wood) be rappers, and they shatter into splintered pieces
I'm brighter than Beacons, i'm seeing weaklings
Can't imagine what has happened to rappin' but now it's weepin
every region that I visit, appreciates that I'm gifted
If you are not the best then I guess me and you are different

I see what you mean about the flow but I feel like I was able to follow it the whole way. Seemed tight to me. Topic was meh. Multies were alright but nothing to spectacular. Same with the punches. As a free style though, this is pretty decent.

yeah man i was diggin this piece. had a nice, smooth flow to it. stayed consistent throughout the whole piece. no qualms from me man. keep doin ya thing.

Descent drop for a freestyle.. If u could drop like this off the top u straight. just seems to be a lil watered down because theres not much content of impact in there... I remember when i freestyled on the regular i used to be a few bars ahead in my mind. So if u dropped this as smooth as it is written it should have sounded dope..also wouldve been nice if u had posted the beat on here.

I thought this was actually pretty cool
the flow is hard to catch here and there
but it's all good, nothing really too bad
but at the same time it's like what?
well for me anyway, I think I just got confused
and didn't know where you were going after a few lines
either way it was a pretty nice piece man...
not the best I've seen from you but still pretty good!

Nice man, hope to read/hear more from you in the future. This had a nice flow to it, in the way I read it the flow never fell off. The topic being focused on ain't nothing new, but I know for me too when I do a freestyle I often end up flowing shit I'm familiar with, so as a freestyle this was real solid.