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Man, i am a veteran with many top noch soldiers,
My ryhmes wake u up like it was mornin and u were smellin foldgers,
guys claim they hard but they sensitive like little girls,
They talk bout all the damage they do but nothin happens like hurricane earl,
With my thoughts i am in victory so b4 the battle i already won,
What comes out this mouth is RAPID FIRE.. call me bruce lee's son,
My capability is uniquely special you kno what call me retarded,
Ur careers similar to nick cannons it was over b4 it started,
So "silence, ill keel you!"..haha muhammed,
And if i wanted to hear an asshole talk i woulda farted,
so trust me when i say i am an intellectual,
u better than me?..ur confused like a bisexual,
when i smile is at u that im laughin,
and when ur rappin?
I think.."damn and i thought the twin towers fallin was the worst thing that could happen",
im original and ur fake like 50 cents dimple,
im the bus driver and ur da SPED licking the windows,
ur SUPERBAD at lyin u have no guns the gigs over,
cuz i have the 9mm in my wasteband like i was hidin a boner.

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Not too bad bro, a few of your lines are a bit long which made me lose tha flow a bit. But that could've been me maybe not rappin it right...but try and keep em as short an sweet as possible, keep on droppin man...peace out.

Thanks for the feedback man....and yeaa you probably read it wrong in sum parts but good looks..stay up.one.

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this was alright for a first drop man Im diggin the whole braggadocio rhyming although I feel a majority of your rhymes is played out nothing too special about this just a regular opener for a newcomer keep writing though my dude

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It was average cause ya seemed to hit hard in some places then just come with real basic lines like the bisexual one. Not bad though I was feelin that twin tower shit. Stay up homie.

And if i wanted to hear an asshole talk i woulda farted

Dam that was LOL worthy

cuz i have the 9mm in my wasteband like i was hidin a boner.

LMAO....
Dude u a funny guy... The Verse was not special but i see definite potential here... just work on your structure and flow and u should get better fast ...keep dropping and stay active and we should see growth quickly