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Im too strong and my weaknesses u cant find em,
My haters are CHILEAN... i dont MINE em,
Never crack under pressure, i measure b4 i sever,
The lever is simply clever,the redder is always better,
My own artillary is killen me,
My ammo reaches infiniti,
u COLLECT other ppls ryhmes....DiSABILITY,
U kidden me?...boyy im RAPiN u lyrically,
No homo DOGGYSTYLE...Sex talk.."mm..are you feelin me?"..
At nite i write what u might find impossible,
Ryhmebusters and ur verses are plausable,
the tigerus river is what im spittin cuz im straight flowin,
MAURY in this bitch cause ur in this mess witout knowin,
But On the FLIPSIDE i stay focus like a microscope,
Hope i never climb the slope,
U shattered certain things but my dreams man u never broke, 
cuz im the FATHER of this show..now deal with the results,
I stay in rythim just perfect cuz its my INTRINSIC CADENCE,
I could give u QWARTERZ and ur ryhmes still wont make sense,
And its hunting season And im PREDATOR X,
Whos next?!....theres no stoppin the best,
Im reachin for the TOP girls gone wild and i wont settle for less,
You'll turn into a quick DECIPLE for ur life is what ur praying,
Dragonball z  im the PRINCE of all SAYINGS,
Get it?..should i finish? YEZZIR.. the verse is over,
now take it like a man its time to bend over...
 

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it was aiiite... that doggy style line was just not feeling it..
Sounded too homo even though you said "no homo"

Flow is pretty cool though. i usually structure my lines to be about even, both in length and syllable count usualy, for audio anyway.

But yea not bad man stay at it

Thanks for the feed man...stay up...one.

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Aight fam, you should definitely work on your structure more and get that flow to connect. I liked some of your concepts, but Anti pretty much nailed it on the head. Read a few pieces, then give it another round, and we can work on it from there homie. One.

-- Fri Oct 01, 2010 3:09 pm --

And in all honesty, this verse makes you sooo look like a homo. Really.