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alpha bill you the fakest-i-seen i'm spraying-glocks-as beta-blockers proving you don't got the heart to stay-on-a-beat*
freaks-on-their-knees ain't praying-to-me bills been-craving net-dating-tryna get n-fl game? "bills" best-"ain't-in-my-league"
test-game-and-you'll-see & believe jesus'-a-beast, while pimping... just ain't fitting the bill like his gay ass smedium-t's
come to your first show revolvers-move-n-stretch put hollows-through-your-chest and really make it a "symbolical"-event
the truths-there-to-witness ya incompetant-at-text audio audible garbage-at-ya-best this goof troop-pairs-some-victims
dudes-sharing-tips-when we see how dude-fairs-with-bitches cuz any bitch gone 5150 over bill's rocking a new-era-fitted**
sym dude-listen nude-bitches? you-witness through porn-on-a-screen never see this dork-in-the-sheets scoring-a-freak
bitches have no-want-for-you-at-all any chick having "ghost-coming-through-her-wall's" definitely got paranormal-beliefs
fuck-with-me buck-fifty bill with two eagles-to reach you believe & see i'm the evilest beast too-gifted-with-the-wordplay
u-witnessing-a-pure-rape here weird seeing "ghost" come back cuz hardly anybody believed you-existed-in-the-first-place
just a misfit-in-the-worst-way bill personal-dirt'll put persons-in-dirt test-jesus best-see-the hammer-when-techs-point
scheming believing you can spit-with-the-best when its easy to see he's "just a bitch-in-the-end" like samus-in-metroid
get ghost with voodoo-rap tools'll-blast 4 in your spleen your a joke-when-you-rap goofy ass sounding hopeless-on-tracks
hos approach-'em-and-laugh only tagged with billdo-for-the-match cause you heard he liked small things poked-in-his-ass
things i'm toting'll-blast put these hos-on-their-ass in case you haven't noticed-their-trash it ain't hard challenging-ghost
he needs my raps-and-it-shows-yo in our tag matches "we" wrote reality-shows you had less written content than reality-shows
you ain't a factor-in-ya-own-quotes master-in-my-own-zone jesus tag with him again? please i'd just rather-do-a-no-show
let me explain when we tagged half-our-shit-was-ghost-wrote by that i mean i ghostwrote half-the-shit-that-"ghost"-wrote
i roast hos by the boat load and when the glocks at your right ear ring now somethings really symbolical-about-you
all-we-do-is-doubt-you don't act like its impossible-to-clown-you when your only remembered when we're talking-shit-about-you
and bill really how many jesus bars does it take-in-a-verse for you to not be ashamed when you claim-it-was-yours
saw the sequence battle and damn that lil lames-getting-jerked reading shit was like watching a pedophile rape-in-reverse
clutching guns at unimpressive-veterans nothing just ugly-ducklings-stressing shit might as well be fucking-uncontested
no love for any stuff-this-dunce-attempted and now ya feelings-are-frail its no wonder seeing bill-in-the-"mails" nothing-unexpected

* - beta blockers = pills for heart arhythmias
** - 5150 = police code for crazy & number string in new era hats

original verse i had for the first round cause i thought jack left the first 12 lines are my original verse for the verse i actually used i ended up just picking my favorite 12 lines outta this and arranged them with minor adjustments

Aight fam, Ima be the first to get at this.... Aheemmm...

Jesus-
alpha bill you the fakest-i-seen i'm spraying-glocks-as beta-blockers proving you don't got the heart to stay-on-a-beat*
freaks-on-their-knees ain't praying-to-me bills been-craving net-dating-tryna get n-fl game? "bills" best-"ain't-in-my-league"

This was hot as an opener, esp with how the Bills have been playing the last few years and its a direct punch/nameflip... The multi's are sick

test-game-and-you'll-see & believe jesus'-a-beast, while pimping... just ain't fitting the bill like his gay ass smedium-t's
come to your first show revolvers-move-n-stretch put hollows-through-your-chest and really make it a "symbolical"-event

This was cool imagery which made the punch more wicked... Im feeling the set up too... Nice way of bringing it around

the truths-there-to-witness ya incompetant-at-text audio audible garbage-at-ya-best this goof troop-pairs-some-victims
dudes-sharing-tips-when we see how dude-fairs-with-bitches cuz any bitch gone 5150 over bill's rocking a new-era-fitted**

This is sick with the wordplay, but its not as hard hitting as a punch the way its worded IMO.

sym dude-listen nude-bitches? you-witness through porn-on-a-screen never see this dork-in-the-sheets scoring-a-freak
bitches have no-want-for-you-at-all any chick having "ghost-coming-through-her-wall's"

I like the imagery and punch with this actually. Though its kinda 'high school-ish', it still hits nicely

fuck-with-me buck-fifty bill with two eagles-to reach you believe & see i'm the evilest beast too-gifted-with-the-wordplay
u-witnessing-a-pure-rape here weird seeing "ghost" come back cuz hardly anybody believed you-existed-in-the-first-place

I liked this in the fullest. Plays back to the previous bar too, which goes unnoticed by alot of people when reading and breaking it down. I think it flowed great, and your multi's are still sick with it...

just a misfit-in-the-worst-way bill personal-dirt'll put persons-in-dirt test-jesus best-see-the hammer-when-techs-point
scheming believing you can spit-with-the-best when its easy to see he's "just a bitch-in-the-end" like samus-in-metroid

A little redundant with the bitch shit, but Im a gamer, so this bar worked cool for me. I think the setup was awkward tho.

get ghost with voodoo-rap tools'll-blast 4 in your spleen your a joke-when-you-rap goofy ass sounding hopeless-on-tracks
hos approach-'em-and-laugh only tagged with billdo-for-the-match cause you heard he liked small things poked-in-his-ass
things i'm toting'll-blast put these hos-on-their-ass in case you haven't noticed-their-trash it ain't hard challenging-ghost
he needs my raps-and-it-shows-yo in our tag matches "we" wrote reality-shows you had less written content than reality-shows

Aight, the first bar your multi's were off IMO, enough to notice with text anyway. I like how you incorporated reaqlity shows, I did that in a battle recently as well.

you ain't a factor-in-ya-own-quotes master-in-my-own-zone jesus tag with him again? please i'd just rather-do-a-no-show
let me explain when we tagged half-our-shit-was-ghost-wrote by that i mean i ghostwrote half-the-shit-that-"ghost"-wrote
i roast hos by the boat load and when the glocks at your right ear ring now somethings really symbolical-about-you
all-we-do-is-doubt-you don't act like its impossible-to-clown-you when your only remembered when we're talking-shit-about-you
and bill really how many jesus bars does it take-in-a-verse for you to not be ashamed when you claim-it-was-yours
saw the sequence battle and damn that lil lames-getting-jerked reading shit was like watching a pedophile rape-in-reverse
clutching guns at unimpressive-veterans nothing just ugly-ducklings-stressing shit might as well be fucking-uncontested
no love for any stuff-this-dunce-attempted and now ya feelings-are-frail its no wonder seeing bill-in-the-"mails" nothing-unexpected

This is where you fucking KILLED it IMO. You are now one of my personal top ten bro. I had no clue that you could deliver on such a high note when it comes to text battles. Im impressed to say the least, and wish you would get in the forum more often instead of just for a tounrey

appriciate the detailed feedback merv you had some good points but i don't agree with the multis in the 4 line segment being off & i don't get what you mean with the bitch shit is redundant when i didn't use bitch twice in that bar or call bill a bitch in any other bars

joke when you rap, hopeless on tracks, approach 'em and laugh, billdo for the match, poked in his ass, all rhyme fine to me

but yeah thanks for the feedback i'll return the favor