Hip Hop Forum

Man,I guess ill never kno how it feels,
i keep fallin and slippen on the same peel,
With The whole world on my shoulders,
Its true it is freezin wen ur alone now my heart grows colder,
While the pen bleeds, the pad sits and recieves,
just got locked out of this world... with no keys,
I sit wonder y i cant b on top,
Just got thrown from a dock,
And im sinkin slowly..ankle tied to a rock,
This is real i dont need to sugar code,
Ive reached the end and i took the road,ima walkin load,
been hurt but manned up grabbed the needle..now my heart is sewed,
As boy i was told, ull b LUCKY if ur verses sold,
but i got luck my ryhmes turned out to b a pot of gold,
But b4 i go, i wanna leave as a prodigy,
kineticly stable too much mass cant handle my velocity,
Aint no stoppin me, i am where i gotta be,
The worlds not ready for armageddon...so i gotta flee,
I got So many ryhmes dont kno what to d b4 im gone,
ill give my lyrics to a bum and tomorrow a star is born.

[ Post made via Mobile Device ]

Solid drop man. This shit seems to be coming straight from your reality which makes it an enjoyable read and one that I think lots of cats can relate to. You got a couple parts that use imagery pretty well too. Overall, I'd say this is solid and I hope you drop more and utilize this site to elevate what your bringin...

Thanks for the feedbakk bro...ill make sure to challenge myself more...ull see alot of drops cummin soon..stay up.one.

[ Post made via Mobile Device ]

Thanks for the feedbakk...ill keep all that in mind next time...this was a basic piece im general just ment for to express myself and all that..didnt do nething to complicated or unique...but yea stay up.

[ Post made via Mobile Device ]

Man u Pretty Deep With ur Rhymes..Seems U Try To Use A Poetic Type Of Expression. Thats Dope.. All U Need to Do Is Work On Ur Structure And Some Vocab Integration... I Think U Can Drop Some Solid Pieces With Jus A lil Work and Practice... Keep Dropping