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Somethin to read in the meantime while i drop "can anybody hear me?" part 2...

Bein persistent is what in-listed me to be a  rather twisted MC,
employin nouns and verbs was never a complication for me,
More of a situation degree like winds picken up smaller debris,
Its nothin serious, its like cats stuck on the trees,
Cuz this lyric stuff is for the strong not for those who grow weak,
i dont snore wen im gone i straight spit ryhmes in my sleep,
Never do i sleep walk outta the house,
i wake up to my suprise im ritin rhymes on the coach,
Never doubt my ability my capabilities shout,
I am triumphant! cuz im growin firm thru the drought,
punchlines are always punctual ready to drop,
This is misionary style and im goin on TOP,
im CUMMIN strong..so its best to take cover,
I must b in track cuz im runnin circles around others,
Eatin rappers constantly,brush ur teeth, cuz im in here like plaque,
if bein nice is being hung den ud sware i was black,
u dont have cancer but u can still make-a-wish,
i can only play the hand that im delt... so go fish,
Im focused, so let me relax and get back on track,
Ill end it here to read what this verse probably lacks..

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I am triumphant! cuz im growin firm thru the drought,

This is a bad ass line.


Over all this was better than Ive seen from you. I noticed you incorporated some wordplay with the missonary/ on top stuff, but its a concept thats been used repeatedly and you didnt really bring anything original with you piece in that department. Keep this flow going, work on some original wordplay to twist in there, then we can work on the delivery/punches and how you bring them about. Nice drop fam and hope youll be dropping again soon.

Had the vibe of a keystyle to me. Wordplay was a bit weak. Just not very original, is what I mean.

Eatin rappers constantly,brush ur teeth, cuz im in here like plaque,

This line was way too long and threw the flow off but otherwise the flow was on point. Try spicing up your drops with few more multies and you could have some dope stuff. I'll peep your other drop, too.

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