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Same rules as before ... House....

8 bars/16 lines

Verses due in 24

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-- Sun Oct 10, 2010 9:45 pm --

This lame beat me before so I know I gotta step up, but how do you beat me and then steal my whole flow setup?/ (see leeroi green VS Quix)
I'm tellin you green this verse I won't let up, I reign (rain) in this game and you about to get wet up/
You tried to steal my style maybe so you can change pace, but damn leeroi even your commas were in the same place/
I've never seen anyone go dickeat off of last place, but I guess you just realized ER is just that great!/
So go ahead and talk about your 1st win I call it hoax, I think you PMed everyone you really had swayed votes/
Take this kid to school so I think you better take notes, vice grip flow and leeroi green's about to get choked/
Throw bullets i shouldn't but then I'll have no fun, work on your kicks and punches Leroy (leeroi) cuz imma bout to show gun/ (Sho Gun - Last Dragon)
Watch my rhymes come out on top like the toast done, I gotta take this win cuz leeroi green you owe one/
Now I got the red dots on you and it's not chicken pox, leeroi green must of got his name cuz he jealous and he kicks a lot/
ER got his name cuz I'm danger and my shit be hot, anybody ever say your rhymes be flames, shit problably not/
Your rhymes weak and you need hooked on phonics, LG I'll make you short circuit like second hand electronics/ (LG is an Electronics brand)
Yea green I think it's time that you paid homage, you Tails (ass) tryna win in a race VS Sonic/
And I didn't wanna vote on his battle wit Quix and seem bias, but I had to vote based on what I saw through my eye lids/
You voted better than me now is that honest?, that's perjury, the pure definition of what a crime is/
I emancipate your rhymes I'm a catalyst wit flows, a tyrant of the game the way I'm collapsing all my foes/
You can tell me that I'm better cuz everyone already knows, you rode my style I'm like wow please get up off my hose (dick)/

.......and cut... End scene... Lol

 

keystyle


yo this is my last text this whole site is a joke,
er the only active and he likes to get smoked,

he low caliber, i'm megatron my hammer the size of ghallagers,
i fire off a shot it look like i launched space shuttle challenger,

you are no challenge-ER, get buckled and fucked up,
feeling like you've been beat with brass knuckles and numchucks'

people gon be wearing your avy pic on t-shirts with this dudes name,
and two dates your birthday and today,

fuck if this is to short this pansy dudes lame,
and now he's got his ass in more shit than andy duphrane,

I shouldn't have to type "get it" or explain a bar for a retard,
judges don't respect the depth of intellect so give this win to ER,

cus i'm a brag and boast this faggots toast sleep on me im propofol I know what matters most,
ers placebo he ain't dope at all but give this man the votes

this whole site should be cheering me if they could only hear me sear a beat,
you're a small fry you have to google earth to see you how you appear to me,


sorry i dropped late i didnt read yours yet be easy

Uppin for votes

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Hmmmm ER your bars are really long so it looks like you have a lot more than you do haha, that really helped you however. I liked both verses especially the flow and Leeroi's steady multies really helped him execute his verse well.. I just think ER had more material to execute, he looked like he was aiming for the head non stop. I'm gonna vote for ER he packed more of a 'bite' I personally think. Good battle boys

I Dont Know The Rules.....Flow LG
Punches LG
Personals ER

But I Have to Give This To LG because it was Just A Cleaner Verse.. More Defined Punches.. i Feel ER was just too much in one line and ur metas were a lil simpler and not hitting as hard.. aiight bro.. i seen u ask for a vote a few times and here it goes... my bad this got slept on

E.R.:

This lame beat me before so I know I gotta step up, but how do you beat me and then steal my whole flow setup?/
I'm tellin you green this verse I won't let up, I reign (rain) in this game and you about to get wet up/

Decent personal jab and some wordplay in the second line. Overall a solid bar. 4/5

You tried to steal my style maybe so you can change pace, but damn leeroi even your commas were in the same place/
I've never seen anyone go dickeat off of last place, but I guess you just realized ER is just that great!/

You kind repeated the sentiment of the last bar but it was somewhat cleverly done. The second line, however, you managed to jab yourself even if only lightly. Using the word "just" twice kind of threw off the flow a bit, IMO. 3/5

So go ahead and talk about your 1st win I call it hoax, I think you PMed everyone you really had swayed votes/
Take this kid to school so I think you better take notes, vice grip flow and leeroi green's about to get choked/

Nothing too hard hitting about this bar. 3/5

Throw bullets i shouldn't but then I'll have no fun, work on your kicks and punches Leroy (leeroi) cuz imma bout to show gun/
Watch my rhymes come out on top like the toast done, I gotta take this win cuz leeroi green you owe one/

I definitely think these two lines should've been reversed. The first line had a nice punch and wordplay in it. Second line felt like more of a set-up. 3/5

Now I got the red dots on you and it's not chicken pox, leeroi green must of got his name cuz he jealous and he kicks a lot/
ER got his name cuz I'm danger and my shit be hot, anybody ever say your rhymes be flames, shit problably not/

Decent personal in the first line but there really wasn't any punch. Again, two lines that could've been reversed for more effectiveness. 3/5

Your rhymes weak and you need hooked on phonics, LG I'll make you short circuit like second hand electronics/
Yea green I think it's time that you paid homage, you Tails tryna win in a race VS Sonic/

Nameflip was ok, but Quix had a better version in his battle versus Leeroy. Second line was meh. 2/5

And I didn't wanna vote on his battle wit Quix and seem bias, but I had to vote based on what I saw through my eye lids/
You voted better than me now is that honest?, that's perjury, the pure definition of what a crime is/

I think this was pretty weak overall. 2/5

I emancipate your rhymes I'm a catalyst wit flows, a tyrant of the game the way I'm collapsing all my foes/
You can tell me that I'm better cuz everyone already knows, you rode my style I'm like wow please get up off my hose/

Another weak one, especially for the closer. 2/5


22/40 Your verse had a strong flow but could've benefited from a little more creativity in the punches.



Leeroi:

yo this is my last text this whole site is a joke,
er the only active and he likes to get smoked,

No real punch here. Just sounds like you're bitching, really. 1/5

he low caliber, i'm megatron my hammer the size of ghallagers,
i fire off a shot it look like i launched space shuttle challenger,

Again, no punch. More self hype than anything. 2/5

you are no challenge-ER, get buckled and fucked up,
feeling like you've been beat with brass knuckles and numchucks'

I liked the multies here, though it's spelled "nun chucks." Still lacking in a punch. Had an iota of wordplay. 3/5

people gon be wearing your avy pic on t-shirts with this dudes name,
and two dates your birthday and today,

I liked it. Kind of creative. 3/5

fuck if this is to short this pansy dudes lame,
and now he's got his ass in more shit than andy duphrane,

Better wordplay here but nothing to original or creative. 3/5

I shouldn't have to type "get it" or explain a bar for a retard,
judges don't respect the depth of intellect so give this win to ER,

Sounds like more bitching. You're going after the site rather than ER. 1/5

cus i'm a brag and boast this faggots toast sleep on me im propofol I know what matters most,
ers placebo he ain't dope at all but give this man the votes

Again. with the bitching. At least you added in some wordplay, to a degree. 2/5

this whole site should be cheering me if they could only hear me sear a beat,
you're a small fry you have to google earth to see you how you appear to me,

Eh, not much of a closer. At least you went after your opponent, though. 3/5


18/40 I was pretty disappointed with this verse. After reading your previous stuff I thought you had some real potential to bring some creative wordplay and punches but you spent a good portion of your verse getting bent over (presumably) your battle with Quix.



I have to give this one to ER for just bringing a more straightforward battle verse.

+1 ER

Personals: ER (ER was consistent with the personals, and had some creative nameplay elements in there. LG had a couple solid personals, but really seemed to just be complaining about the site and sending punches in that general direction)

Punches: ER (LG had some decent punches, but they just weren't directed at the purpose of the battle, kinda felt like he was droppin a verse expecting to loose and expecting shitty votes. ER had some nice punches, and his wordplay made the punches all the better.)

Flow: Tie (Both had pretty good flows. ER's was more consistent from bar to bar, felt like the bars would flow together more smoothly. LG's though was also good, had a kinda internal rhythm in the way I read it which kept the energy propelling forward nicely.


Overall: ER
Good battle fellas. To me it's pretty clear that ER took this battle, but more than anything I think that's cuz LG's verse was more about spittin' upon the site and only had a couple bars that were actually battle ready. ER's verse was consistent and a solid battle verse with a quality that could hold its own against most cats here, though there were a couple lines that seemed unnecessary (like the eye lids line). Wordplay was real nice.

my vote goes to ER


i dont know man his punches hit harder had some nice personals in there and it flowed real nice to.......overall i feel he came stronger than leeroi

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That's 4-1... Rap this up mods thx... Good shit again leeroi green... anytime and place... you know I'll accept it...