Hip Hop Forum

Check the syllable mathematics
breaking shit down
not too many can handle it

when I start talking with
my hands eyes keep moving
because of what I'm doing
always mad confusing

I got you coughing blood up
so stand up
or shut the fuck up

cuz I need no stress
for bullet holes
to appear in yo chest

and it is my fault
and I did remember it
born where you die
until I take away yo membership

Mc's who had lip
are now back in school
Like DAS EFX
taking classes

life's a bitch
with the diseases and rashes
menopause periods and Hot Flashes

Everything about it read Simplistically, everything lacked in complexity and prosperity
No usages of mulit's, meta's or concepts to be displayed, with only a basic one word rhyme scheme
Lengthen your lines to produce a sentence, usages of set up lines leading to a punch or delivery of meaning

~Mark~

Pretty Simple Here.. Seems Like U Just Started Text Writing. i Can See How U Can Make This Deliver In Audio But It Would be Very Short For That As Well. Id Say Think Of A Topic And Put Something Down On Paper That Would Include A lil More Imagination And word play. as in metaphores and multiple rhyming syllables...