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-As wake up in the morning take a look into the mirror/
-Thinking life's a trivia , with questions I cant figure/
-I make jesus bleed , when I fracture the scripture/
-For mercy's what I plead , to attach with his mixture/
-Of people doings deeds , like the pastor or preacher/
-But its hard to succeed when you cant capture the picture/
-The chance for me to change , is thinner than a whisker/
-My life is out of place , im a sinner in a minster/
-I wanna clean my system , and filter my impurities/
-Because I feel the symptoms , of being a minority/
-Insane how my authority , is puzzling , it has to be/
-My brains main priority of husteling , like cassidy/
-Dont think I can sustain the thought of living like a zero/
-I wanna change my name , from a villan to a hero/
-Im tired of being Malcolm , in the middle of the two/
-So no matter whats the outcome like falcon im punching through/

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This was a good piece man.. i enjoyed this piece... i dont usually feed on written, but this caught my eye and kept me interested.. which is the objective... solid drop homie.. true words

Dope piece and I definitely gotta give extra props for the Captain Falcon reference. Some nice vocab and the flow was on point through out. Keep dropping.

Thanks for the feedback guys

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Haha I was just listening to Renegade by Jay-Z and Eminem earlier and still had the beat in my head when I read this. I think it flowed well you should try recording it over that beat! I also liked the vocab you used and how you kept on topic till the very end without filler.