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A song i did a while ago, non profit beat from soundclick.com. What yall think? Its cool to be mean, but i have feelings lol

First off Welcome to IllestLyrics.com. IM Deciple.. Stay active, Feed and you will get feed. Now taht out the way... The beat is sick.. I liked the flow you did this.. the fast to slow was creative.. im not a fan of the hook even tho its catchy... i think you did a good job on mixing and everything.. props homie..

Nice everything man, like the chorus was hott, very clean flow. It's unique, but carries the song well. The lyrics fit the concept, and the emotion was there. Nice drop man you def. have potential, keep it up...

shit lemme know when you wanna collab lol.......still learning on my pro tools 2.......good drop jus keep doing ya thing fam like the chorus its catchy but id put some more swagg or somethin into it........it would make it stand out bro but overall good drop.......

Alright, I can feel this track. The hook could be really good, its got a good rhythm and its catchy, but maybe get someone else to do it, I think your voice works better in the rapped verses than the sung hook. You mixed your vocals real well. Your lyrics are well done and your flow style is good overall, however, there are a few places I feel you tripped over your tongue a bit, but just slightly. Overall, I liked it.

My Bad, Ive been in Denver for the holidays, so my bad i took so long to respond.
@ Deciple: Thanks for the welcome, first one other than the automated one. I'm not a fan of the chorus either, so thanks for being honest. I appreciate your feedback man, ill repay on first chance.
@ Livenlearn: Appreciate it homie, the concept of the song was actually what life might look like through Jesus eyes. Thanks for complimenting on the flow. Ill get you back lickity split.
@ Slicka: Hey man, like i said i just got back home from the holidays, so lets do this. Shoot me some details and I'm down. As for the SWAG needing on the chorus, i regret to inform you I'm a nerd free of swag. Plus i really hate doing chorus's. Holler back fool.
@ IntrinsicCadence: Yeah man, id say 98% of the reason i have a hard time showing people my songs is cuz the chorus. I hate singing, but for some reason my brain wants to, so i agree, the chorus is weak sauce. Thanks for being Honest.

Digging the style. One thing that caught me thou is that your vocals are a little bit to low. The flow on the verses is nice, you might wanna go back thou and try to hem up a few peices. The hook has potential but its irritaing my ears a little bit, i think it might be your tone in some parts of it. From what i can tell you did a good job on your back up vocals. Overall good track and with a little more work you got something good.

RedRackRecords, appreciate the feedback man. Ill admit the hook is not my strong suit on any song. Maybe I should just vito hooks all together and spare myself and ur ears the pain. Ill raise the vocals up and see if there's a difference, I'm still learning the whole mixing thing, so if u have any tips it'd be welcomed. I think I need to start recording in pieces instead of a full verse in one shot. Thanks RedReck

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damn...... ima leave it at that homie. just daaaaammn.

Damn good or damn bad lol? Thanks for the feedback whichever it is

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shit was dope i think you can make it better u need a better engineer ur vocals were off so was ya flow a lil bit you should def invest in an exec producer you can remake this into something great.....I appreciate return feed btw if you can I got a joint called BMF 203Mix out at the moment

damn hot sir! scratch your eyes out with beaver claws sick! lol. keep it up homie im about what your doin bro.

Like the vibe of the track and the way you decide to flow over the beat was good. Nice track sir

I really liked this. You have a voice I haven't heard before so that's good. Try using some multis though, it won't do anything but make your verse sound better cause honestly your set on everything else.

agree with sentus! keep it up bruh.