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Just finished it, might aswell drop it today lol.


Sometimes it's like time freezes
Sometimes I try to find pieces that aren't there I'm just making up stupid puzzles in my head again that are impossible to solve.

Well fuck it, let's go drink.


Like I fell into this bar, it all comes back to this
Slamming back a Jack while snacking on a pack of chips
Laughing joking passive smoking, chicks with massive tits
Never skip a drink I sip till I pass out into a black abyss
I used to live to party but now it's more of a routine
And behaving myself now ain't as boring as it seemed
In my teens I was glorious, scoring with whores galore
Taking drugs like vitamins, I wanted more and more
Their legs loosening up with every gin that I pour
Ready to get their face stickier than cinema floors
Cause life's a poem, and everyday's another line to perfect
The way it flows, and the way the day ties to the next


Suddenly everything slows down, I feel like I stopped breathing
A guy next to me, before how could I have not seen him ?
He looks so familiar, but I can't place a name to the face
Like a faded memory my brain contains just a trace
He shakes his head and walks away, now I see him clearly
Like I'd hurt him severely, but weirdly still he reveres me
His complexion healthy everything about him was neat
Pristine, not a crease from his shoulders down to his feet
I asked 'who are u, who u with ? where did u come from ?'
'A ghost u run from, I remind u of what u done wrong'
'I don't believe in ghosts, the whole fuckin idea is silly'
'You're just in denial, did u forget that YOU KILLED ME ?'
And in a flash he was gone, now everything is back to life
What the fuck just happened ? Ok.. no more Jack tonight
I get up, and say 'I had enough of this scene, I'm leavin'
'What's the matter with u man ? u look like u seen a demon'
Wouldn't he like to know...


I went home, passed out and soon I began dreaming
Just a bunch of shadows and the sound of a man screaming
I woke up bleeding, it came outta my eyes and ears
I started to cry with fear, I couldn't hide my tears
Thought I was gonna die right here.. WHY ME ?????????
Then that guy appeared, and said 'u will die just like me'
And it clicked. 'We're the same person. How could it be ?'
'I'm ur ghost, I'm dead. I'm everything u could've been,
But you'll never be me, no matter how much u try to be
That ship has long sailed, so u might aswell die with me'
Cause life's a poem, and everyday's another line to perfect
The way it flows, and the way the day ties to the next

I should've taken that into account a long time ago.....

Man this shit was pretty nice, the flow on it was consistent for the most part the normal multies all workin with the flow was going well, the vocab was decent, as for the execution of the drop was nice, i enjoyed the read no doubt, lookin forward to the second part good drop Dom

Excellent piece. I'm sensing a lot of regret here. You did a great job of conveying different emotions all through out, though. Reckless abandon gives way to quiet reflection. Suspicion followed by confusion. Anger and regret in the end.

The flow was great from top to bottom. I never had a problem keeping up with it. Multies were inconsistent but when they were there they were really there. I especially liked the way you started it off:

Like I fell into this bar, it all comes back to this
Slamming back a Jack while snacking on a pack of chips
Laughing joking passive smoking, chicks with massive tits
Never skip a drink I sip till I pass out into a black abyss

This really helped to bring it full circle, too:

Cause life's a poem, and everyday's another line to perfect
The way it flows, and the way the day ties to the next

Good shit, man. Keep it up.

Good stuff. Makes me want to get in touch with my ex wife.

Enjoyed it Moe
"Like I fell into this bar, it all comes back to this
Slamming back a Jack while snacking on a pack of chips
Laughing joking passive smoking, chicks with massive tits
Never skip a drink I sip till I pass out into a black abyss"