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this holy ground ocupied with devotions to dark entities//
spirtual colony consisting of a abundance of dark energies//
were the gates of the valley dwell in blood,sweat and tears//
a place far from ordinary, a cavity thats like a aquarium of fears//
the valley were shadows are empty, the light forever obscure//
resting connection for lifeless souls, and the torture they endure//
with the turmoil of mediums endeviour to connect souls on this side//
occupied with a watercourse of the tears of those misfortunate cries//
tryna walk through the valley until they get to there spirtual nivarna //
silent whispers,empty catacombs echoing screams of a prima donna//
howling wind sweeps this soil,a thirsty and arid hallow above earth//
where all these convicted souls walk alone till the dawn of new birth//
many scared and others pleased, spirits swearling around above me//
clashes of colours brought out from inside them against a black sea//
this valley laid out with caskets similar to the darkest of cemitary//
where mistakes of mankind lie in these abnormal walls of symitary//
each in there own place, till the awaking of this evil existience//
where they'll rain down on the earth with no kind of persistance//

Lol I read this in Vinnie Paz's voice, this really sounds like some JMT shit cause I could hear it over one of their beats and it even flowed like Vinnie.

I like these kinda drops they can be interpreted in many ways but the subject I got from it was selfishness. I'd be interested in knowing what went through ur mind when u wrote it though. Vocab was good but u almost crossed the line where intriguing vocab turns into babble, always keep that line in mind when writing pieces like these.

All in all, enjoyable. Stuff like flow and rhymes were consistent and everything was upto par. I'm curious to see what you'll do with Collectively Ill. Keep droppin.