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Relax, ease back im really known to heat tracks/
Its been a long time now im back like I relapsed/
Addicted to the mic so u kno I gotta hold it close/
One of my linesll prolli make a fiend overdose/
Go comatose im a devil to my coldest bone/
Ill macully colchin phonies catch u when ur home alone/
its been long now im in the zone like twilight/
y do I rhyme nice while im smokin on the pine spice/
you call me satin u hatin but I be patiently waitin/
Wit the eyes of a raven so wat u doin here/
its prolly nothin u fuckers don't wanna try me im rugged/
so keep on hidin behind shutters im speakin super clear/
I come out late in the night when u ain't able to fight/
and haunt ur house witta knife u hear ur fam screamin/
cuz im sick and sadistic to make ur mind go ballistic/
im from the underworld u just met witta damn demon/bitch

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Good read, pretty evil, but the only line i couldnt plug in due to flow or rhyme sceme is: "its prolly nothin u fuckers don't wanna try me im rugged/" <--- erno, just didnt fit, maybe for a reason...

this was ok...its just as the title states...it seems as though u were just rambling off random thoughts and making them fit...which is cool but sometimes it really doesnt work as well as youd hope it would sooooo a little more work at it and youll be murdering these lines man sooooo keep doing what your doing and itll come together....

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appreciate the feedback it was really just kinda random thoughts but thanks anyways im gonna continue to work at it all criticism is welcome bad or good