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... so I don't got the skills to hang with the best writers on this site? You might want to check the writtens!

I discipline men with tremendous pen twitch
Quick to end these misfits and leave their thick skin stitched
Render bitch kids with... saliva suicidal and new grove recitals
Crushing chests, blood gushing mess that’s bruising your idols
The next cat that tries to compare my writes adjacent
To some back to the basic fake shit may get
Avidly fascinated when I cave his
Chest in with battleaxes and cadence
Prowl the matrix and devour light shows, sour cries grow
All you can do for aL is scowl and die slow
The foulest psycho with vowels to drive optimists off the cliff
aL proceed to drop the gift often missed by dick ridin’ operatives
ten bucks to cop the disc and get your mind blown and flustered
Ya dry bones “crushded” Blow the roof off this bitch like a sky dome ruptured
Liquefied glycerin shots envision a prism of lyricism taught
Thought and discipline stops when I grab a crowbar to force feed you in warp speed
Jam a Pearl necklace case up your nostrils and torch creeds for Nicene
My word was born hungry, crawled back to lick the placenta clean
Demented schemes with the same twisted theme my ancestors did
As the sledgehammer rips I vomit flamethrowers that fry the lungs of lesser kids
Smack ya track around a game of build you up and hack you down
Just another practice lacking cat whose vaginal track is cactus bound....

Nadda Nah Nudda!

Those are a shit load of rhymes man... Kinda funny but wierd, that Riggz is your alter-ego, but in the written, you refer to another alter-ego aL b. I'd get confused. I know its one of your most basic lines, but my favorite is; "All you can do for aL is scowl and die slow". Solid piece to rep your skill man. "As the sledgehammer rips I vomit flamethrowers that fry the lungs of lesser kids" haha, too fucking good man.

this shit was pretty good man, the flow was nice i fell into a groove with that shit, the vocab was nice and you did well to incorporate the multies into that, this piece may have been like a lil random but shit made the message clear that you dont mess around mean business i liked this drop man, so shit good to have you back no doubt about it keep this shit comin

I thought this was pretty solid, had some funny shit and well worded punches. The flow stayed pretty much always on point, and only felt ever so slightly forced here and there (like when u stick in the word 'adjacent', i don't know feels forced and like u shouldn't end the line with that word). U use ur vocab nicely, but there are a few points where I kinda have trouble understanding what ur trying to say (i.e. "Liquefied glycerin shots envision a prism of lyricism taught"--- great flow but the content could be expressed with a lot more clarity, kinds feels like u sacrificed some content for the sake of the flow). But overall, this was an enjoyable read, always enjoying reading ur writtens, they always got a lot of creativity and humor in em. Keep droppin'.....

this was nice...the word usage is what really stood out to me more then anything...the flow was cool here and there...but I think the way u twisted some of ur words is what made it stick out to me...nice work though Riggz nice to see u doing ur thing again...keep doing u!

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'Preciate it Fam.. I need to post/reply more in the writtens. It might be the only place for texts the way the battle grounds and tournaments are going.

this some dope shit, so many rhymes its confusing at times lol. but overall the drop is nice, keep elevatin homie

Yeah, I pretty much agree with Cadence and JJ. This is without a doubt once of the best pieces Ive seen from you, with the word usage and the multi's, and some comedy thrown in the mix, I mean it was a good fun read. The ending had me rolling. There were parts in the middle that seems kinda forced with the word usage, just where I had to read a couple lines again to see where you were going with it. The glycerine line and a couple before that. Just reading them again took away from the smoothness some. Over-all a really good drop though. Keep at it and lets see more drops from you fam.

What??? Toyh came with a compliment not riddled with sarcasm? HA! I can sleep easy now. Murk, always preciate your feed back, it comes with both praise and critique with things to work on. Thanks man.

Funny thing, I always thought this http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/psalms-vt15312.html was one of my best writtens.

Man the flow was dope.. Nice multies and such.. Good punches and what ever.. N U Alb? Hmmm good shit Bruh

dogg .. i was hangin on the flow. shit was tight fam, you really strung this together nicely.

one of your better pieces fah sho!

this was a pretty dope drop man. i can tell you didnt put as much into it though, i think if you took your time with a piece it would come out twice as potent. not taking anything away from this of course, just saying. keep doin ya thing man.

Shit man that was good flow was spot on nice use of multis...definatly a very nice peice

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