Hip Hop Forum

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3_EhcGahxJs

im an immigrant,
comin from a small town at a young age my parents gave me this,
chance to dance and look at the images
different from there own cuz they really were limited
cold war the snow froze indoors
anybody with a voice was choked clog the throat
communist state irate no outsider known
only inner religion, was supported it molded
the people to sheeple stand with cold shoulders
but the struggle taught us the morals
praise what we got even if its not a lot
thats why i stand up, try to shine like a solstice
but sometimes i get caught up in the motives
of the peoples evil loosing my focus
gotta keep goin dont stop the vocals
cuz my parents never had a chance to be noticed
this is for the kids who feel lost like tourists
real folks with thought, society's distorted
stick your middle fingers up dont give a fuck
when you face adversity, you gotta stand up

this was nice...didnt really catch the idea right away...I mean it suited what you were tryin to say but I was kinda feeling...the excessive use of tryna create multis was really unnecessary..I dont know its just me though...sometimes u just got to let ur mind go and not try to be too tongue twistin because it may take away from the real beauty of a piece -_- keep writing

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