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Let the movement of the music be your muse.
Just infuse it wit ur views- u can use it, light the fuse,
don't confuse it, u can choose to ignite it and go booooom
or just ride it like a womb that's providin' u with life's loom...
Don't be silenced by the night's gloom, cuz u harness all the bright hues.
You can fight through this monsoon to pilot the mic and write true...
You're a fighter, u can fly through this typhoon that blinds you,
this is what I do- to find the rhythm and rhyme's root...
It lies latent inside you, waitin' for ur mind to rise anew,
until the time is due- for you- to provide the fruit...
These ties that bind you- can emancipate ur mind too,
it's all in how ya find you- and if follow ur callin' u might soon.
With this knowledge ur sight zooms, 'til ur every pixel's in a tight view,
but ur image isn't life dude, so find ur rhythm in the light diffused.
Live ur life on the vivid and alive route, don't let the fire inside u subdue.
Minus a few, it seems like passion's been burnt to it's ashes, it's time to renew.
From dust to action to dust, if the cycle a' life flashes fast by you,
u will never get it back, think a' that when ur livin' the life u left behind you.

Wow, this is fuckin sick with the multi's and the metaphors. Really I wish you would have added more. Only thing is, yep you guessed it, you could always incorporated more wordplay into this one, I like that shit though when it comes to a written, you know that. I like the flow alot though. Its sick man. And the way you have things worded are nice. If this were on a beat, I would want to get with it, no doubt. Bro, you only continue to improve, and this is not an exception. Nice fucking drop.

You're a fighter, u can fly through this typhoon that blinds you,
this is what I do- to find the rhythm and rhyme's root...
It lies latent inside you, waitin' for ur mind to rise anew,
until the time is due- for you- to provide the fruit...
These ties that bind you- can emancipate ur mind too,
it's all in how ya find you- and if follow ur callin' u might soon.
With this knowledge ur sight zooms, 'til ur every pixel's in a tight view,



I was feeling this mah dude!! this came across nice with good flow ... not to overwhelkming with the vocab but an effective piece regardless! stay up fam!

yeah this was a dope drop homie. no complaints here. good shit.

The beginning really reminds me of Lupe for some reason
I don't know maybe it's the rhymescheme that you used
that's what really catches me in the beginning, as I read on
you kept it, which is dope, not too many people like to do that
because it becomes predictable, but you have a inclined vocab
which brightens up the piece, very nice work my dude, really has a nice vibe to it
hopefully you record it....keep writing...dueces!

Let the movement of the music be your muse.
Just infuse it wit ur views- u can use it, light the fuse,
don't confuse it, u can choose to ignite it and go booooom
or just ride it like a womb that's providin' u with life's loom...

smooth start

Don't be silenced by the night's gloom, cuz u harness all the bright hues.

You can fight through this monsoon to pilot the mic and write true...
You're a fighter, u can fly through this typhoon that blinds you,
this is what I do- to find the rhythm and rhyme's root...

Liked this

Thought you came stronger in the first half but thats debatable
either way this was a cool read, keep at it.

woah man this is sick
pretty nice drop keep it goin...

You can fight through this monsoon to pilot the mic and write true...------ NICE FUCKIN LINE BRO!!!!

im nt gnna go line for line because to be honest there are so many hot lines here that itd take hours to decipher. multies on point! love the rhyme scheme! love the topic!(you stayed on point throughout dawg). this is raw. a great read. good work bro. keep elevating that shit homie!

yo ya wordplay on this shits crazy........could follow the flow and was structred good. nice drop hommie