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your flow is progressing bro! every track gets better and better. this one is probly my fav. drop of yours. you seem to ride the beat much beter on this one. and that chick vocal is raw. keep doing your thing slicka.

Co-Signed. You Deff Came With A Better On Beat Flow. This Girl Sounds Amazing. I Bet She'd Sound Better With My Dick In Her Mouth. But Damn. Kinda Reminds Me Of Nelly's Joint (Just A Dream) The Way She Delivers The Like A Dream Part On The Hook. Lemme Switch The Focus On You. I Think You Should Do Sumthing To Support Your Main Vocals. It Seems Plain. You Need Sum Ad-Libs, Or Panned Vocals Acting As Layers/Supporters. Lyrics Are Strait, Nothing Super Amazing, But Not Too Shabby Either. ooh, Sounds Like U Messed Up "I Gave You Ur Chance", 2nd Verse. Look Back At That, I Might Be Wrong, But Ehh. Ahhh I Don't Like How It Ends So Abruptly! Anywho, Decent Track. Just Watch Your Syllable Counts In Your Lines And That Should Improve Your Flow. Good Listen

honestly this isn't your best... lol... you keep the same tone through out the song and it makes me lose focus... theres no dubs or ad-libs or stabs or anything... its just boring... i mean contents okay... lyrics are okay... flow you slowed it down but theres some parts where your rushin to make the punch fit... edit that shit man... write it to where it flows smoothly... this song sounds very amateurish and i hate to say that but its the truth man.. no hate or anything just tryin to give ya pointers... if i had to rate this song i'd probably give it a 6/10... just take every piece of advice u get and use it... put it towards your music bruh... before you know it you'll be shinin brightly on the mic...

Yeah definitely got that "just a dream by nelly" feel in the hook.. yeah like lawgix said its the same tone and everything through out the verses and kinda makes me lose focus... layers would make this way better.. but you are improving. and quality is getting better from when i first heard you.. but again this aint your best.. IMO.. keep dropping homie

This has got some potential, but as others have mentioned there's some ways this could def be improved. A bit less monotone in your flow would be a good start. A bit of mixing in your vocals, with an occasional back track here and there would also help. Your flow ain't bad, but it needs more energy and emotion, and with ur rather slow flow speed it needs to be a bit smoother when transitioning from one word to the next. But from listening to ur shit I can tell u've got an ear on improvement, and think u got some potential if u keep improving...