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shit cant come but once...
not in the morning not at nite only in the toilet i take the shit and hear a dyke.....conserving like a hoe....why dont you fuck faces leave a king alone....because i got bad survelance that i own......with the shit i be talking about is pro.....not a average foe hoe......my shit like lyricist i'm mos fed not mos def shit by the way what do you call yourself rerun dmc the new klick with a disease that makes you repeat your feeds....its allright till you get loud as fuck with that shit that dont make comentary cents...what you should do is pay me to show you what is a whole in epic and erra term sense......when can i back you up man my apology for the disses....but i would be wrong and i dont dwindle my self nuh uh.....pussy as bitches........if i were to be any thing violent yall pussy as cats would do what you do pussy think rational and i'm the one byten...listen i dont even dig jiven.....

It's hard for me to "jive"with your pieces honestly
it'd be easier to read with structure seriously
syllables are an important thing with flow
If one line has 5
And the next has too many to count then it straight up blows
I can see you're trying which is good, so keep dropping, but it reads like an essay. Good luck man.

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well i couldnt follow this because the structure but from what i read if you could structure it

not in the morning not at nite
only in the toilet i take the shit and hear a dyke
conserving like a hoe....why dont you fuck faces leave a king alone....
because i got bad survelance that i own
.with the shit i be talking about is pro
.....not a average foe hoe
......my shit like lyricist i'm mos fed not mos def
shit by the way what do you call yourself rerun dmc the new klick
with a disease that makes you repeat your feeds
....its allright till you get loud as fuck with that shit that dont make comentary cents...
what you should do is pay me to show you what is a whole in epic and erra term sense......
when can i back you up man my apology for the disses....
but i would be wrong and i dont dwindle my self nuh uh.....pussy as bitches........
if i were to be any thing violent yall pussy as cats would do what you do pussy think rational and i'm the one byten...
listen i dont even dig jiven.....

maybe^ its hard to tell fam eitha way keep droppin
slicc

this is whak niga. just bein real. damn