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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Qds73gHtxsk[/video]

Download: http://usershare.net/r7juaxjiqvyz

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(Sentus)
I'm the rawest to spit, about as flawless as it
Gets, so pay more attention or get lost in the mist
Not a coffin exists can keep me locked in its midst
I'll swim to the bottom of loch ness and sit
Talk to the fish; ask em where the monsters at
Whip that bitches ass too n leave her on her back
I'm only harm for rap but I'm seekin a deal
And won't stop till I rest in the Elysian Field
Cause even I feel that when the games on the line
You grip the pole tight so I'm keepin it real
You must be mistaken, you ain't kill the beat
You were so boring on the mic that it's still asleep
You'll feel this heat the very second the base slams
A monster on the mic, the nerdlucks from space jam
I laugh at you faggots that keep playin my shit
Then try and talk crap about me but stay on my dick

This was well written but ya flow has too many pauses you need more swag slash attitude.

Nice Flow on this one man, a short and sweet rhyme, def. cool that u brought the ol schoo back with a new school flow. Like the guy above me said mayb a lil more bounce in ya flow to make it move smoother, other than that good drop.

Didn't Like The Lil Intro U Did. And Never Really Cared For This Instrumental. It Seems Like Ur Quality Is Rough Edged, Not Smooth. Good Multies And Delivery. I Think You Coulda Did The Closure Bar A Lil Better, Seemed Rushed To Me Bro. Sum Good Lines:

"I'm the rawest to spit, about as flawless as it
Gets, so pay more attention or get lost in the mist
Not a coffin exists can keep me locked in its midst
I'll swim to the bottom of loch ness and sit
Talk to the fish;"

Really Enjoyed How That Flowed And Lined Up. The Rest Of Tha Joint Was Ehhh IMO. Decent Listen Tho man

hey dude didnt mind it at all i like the sound of ur voice ova the beat u sorta suite it in ur own way but yeh def listen to these guys advice. i personally thought ur flow was too slow for this beat. biggie pulled it off cos thats just his style but maybe find an alternative style that all you man. but props on this one 7.5/10

Thanks for all the feed guys, I'll take what you said into consideration next time I record.

Yeah, its always tough to remix a track from legendary artist's... standards are way higher.. The into.. yeah wasnt feeling that.. as to the verse.. it was cool, nothing outstanding or nothing that shinned.. i like the verses you do but full length tracks are nice also haha.. Decent Drop Tho

Thanks man