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just a song i got in the works a ruff copy checkit out
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please feed i got some more to drop as soon as i get some feed

Not sure if you meant to misspell poison, but it reads weird. This one has a better delivery method than the other track you uploaded. Lyrics are nice, almost boneish. I like how you flip the delivery by changing the air in your diaphragm, so thumbs up. Do you record all in one bang? if so try multi tracking a main verse vocal, you might be able to pull off some of your raps better. Some parts really remind me of bone lol. Some parts seem like they'd be red lining, so check that. Cussing is a lack of intelligence, and you say all forms of fuck a lot lol, but you free styling so its cool. The rhyming at about 1:40 and forward is pretty dope. Oh shit, bone and cypress lol. Cut the end off your track, lol, i can hear you push away from the mic. Good shit man.

thanks again punch drunk good feed alot for me to sharpen my dagger with
upping this

Always loved this beat, uh, you need a little work on your flow and try to be more creative with your rhymes. To much average nonsense out there if you wanna be noticed you gotta give people somethine they dont hear everyday....anyways that just my opinion, dont stop though...peace

thanks for the feed uppin

Ite, You Really Like Sayin Fuck Huh? Quality Is Decent, But Your Vocals Are Really High. I Enjoyed How You Switched Up Like PD Said, And You Do Resemble Cypress Hill With Your Voice. For Freestyles, One Tracking Is Acceptable, But Try To Keep Your Positioning And Presence The Same Throughout. Not Much I'm Hearing That I Can Really Feed On, Cuz It's A Freestyle. Not Your Average Song. I Hear That Push Away Too, Cut That Lol. Overall, Decent Listen. Kinda Rough, And High On Tha Vocals, But For A Freestyle, Not Bad At All. Looking Forward To Hearing More.

Got that early 90's vibe.. kinda mysterious dark track.. kinda need more "UMP" in your vocals.. try using other words then cuss words.. cuss words just make you look like you couldnt come up with anything else besides that word... you know.. keep dropping