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decent enough piece. especially for having that many bars. I would work on making your rhyme schemes a bit more complex, although thats not how some people prefer to do it. I like your steez

a few contrived/corny lines like

Scream it so loud they can hear me through outerspace

but, all in all, good piece

I thought shit was pretty clean I didnt read it all...didnt need to,I probably would have just grown envious of your skill...the punch that grabbed my attention was the whole friends picking up drug habits like the olympic torch....nice...ill be back to read all of it and give you a more full perspective but Im pretty sure Im going to tell you that flow structure wordplay punches etc are fairly solid

Yo man, it was a fucking awesome piece and I salute you for it. This really hit me deeply:

Just admire ya later, since there's no saving you sooner//
No Delorian, yet going backwards is the way of the future//
So now when yesterday begins, you'll see tomorrow end//
Sorrow, relapse is just the recycle bin ya keep your bottles in//

loved it! to long tho but worth the wait