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suicidal intentions

is the last that i mentioned

but since then

ive had a more vivid vision

of my wrist indention

overdose on dope like homer simpson

if there aint enough crimson

but it flows well as long as i keep it under water

my arms are a sure slaughter

but there is a need for me to go a bit farther

i grip the blade harder and slice my jugular vein

finally im done with the pain

cuz reality is far more worst than dantes inferno

9th ring were i odly burn cold

this was alright...it seems like a verse for a song
like your just tryna keep up with the beat
which is cool, but you need a little more depth in this
this would be cool if your cyphering with friends
and just tryna get some Ooo's and Ahh's
keep writing man!

appreciate the link it opened my eyes

and QwaterZ i feel what ya sayin and deff goin to keep writtin

my arms are a sure slaughter

but there is a need for me to go a bit farther

i grip the blade harder and slice my jugular vein

You had something here.. Elaborate!

yeah i just realized what you talkin about

i'll be sure to do that next time

i dont really edit or anything

i just write whats on my mind and post

Hey bro. Yea its great to just post straight up but if ur tryna catch sum attention maybe write it out n read thru it a few times. A couple hours later your views on the piece will b different. Or not.. All good I do it all the time man. Anyways this isnt bad just b sure to use these feeds man

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I'm new on here, don't really know much about the way things go but I been readin some posts, nice message, yo, I feel this shit cause I've felt it. do what you do, time is progress.