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i do verse 2

First dude, was rather predictable. Delivery terms that is. Hes flows good, but nothing great. I do appreciate the fact that he fed into the chorus with his verse. I can tell you're rolling a lot more words, which is cool when its mastered. You've come a long way, but your story was kind of all over the place. You ended it, which in a different term "conclusion, by saying you don't want this fame anymore, but the chorus never really gave me the feeling that it was referring to fame, know what i mean? Your improving your production tip, so props on that. As for your dubs, i heard non really which is a good thing, are you still panning them like 2 does? if you are your getting good at it, and if your not, obviously you don't need to. Some lines seemed to be heavy on the syllable count. Write shit out on the computer screen, sometimes i find it easier to flow better when I'm visually acknowledging my syllable count. Why only 2 verses though. Songs def on the top of the list of your tracks, not your best, but getting good. Elevation son!!!

nah im not panning anymore i jus found out how to lower my dubs so its not over powering and yeah im trying to experiment more and more i noticed its different if i type if in my phone compared to writting it on paper

yea the syllable count does need work, because it doesnt sound right when ur squeezin words in a such a tight space, the message wasn't bad...I enjoyed the chorus, and the mixing was much better than wat Im use to hearing, so good work...

Quality With Both The Chorus And Verses Are Amazing From What I've Heard So Far. You're Gettin Better With Tha Mixing Fam. Watch Tha Delivery On Your Verse Fam, You Started Off Rushing Your Lines, Then Midway Through It Really Smoothened Out, Then After Your Independence Day Line (Which Was A Good Punchline) You Went Back To Rushing Them Again. You're Getting REAL Good Fam, But You Need To Sit Back And Figure Out How NOT To Rush Your Vocals

thanx fam i appreciate the feed