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It could never be you and I, as far as the eye can see

always blind from tears and the scars are kinda deep

over bullshit, constant headaches, no nights of sleep.

Frustrating when you love, the love's putrid from a mile

used to think we going strong, holidays we held it down

but the best part is YO we have a CHILD!

I'll be polite, and calm down

make a visit, even stay awhile

But that's it.

and don't compare me to him

this weed good, my inner thoughts have a weird influence

The man in mirror appears to be as I used to be

it's no use, I'm used to we

being the way that I'm used to... why you callin' me ?

voice-mail fulla deposits

and I'll try ignore it, start a text conference

and only return the brief pause for a slight importance

it ain't no accident, hope ya happy with your insurance

dude.......Im in the same damn situation...except I have two kids....this was short but on point....I don't normally critique pieces that seem like poetry or are emotional but good job.,....you got me trippin on my ex off that shit good job lol

Thanks

like fatal x was saying this is realy EMO rap ...
but never the less it's heartfelt and has some good inner thoughts
I like how you made this simple for anyone to get into and relate with
nice concept for a track
you should try writing a 2nd verse

keep up

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