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Re: Red, White & Blue Skidmarks

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 10:27 am
by Phasewon
"Government power creates a public that scatters//
So my subject matter is only about subjects that matter//"

^^Perfect opener.

This shit was dope, the first verse clearly stood out to me as the best, the first and second were dope but seemed more rushed, as well as the complexity of the rhymes falling off a bit, but each line stayed consistent and had a relevant point, nice shit.

Re: Red, White & Blue Skidmarks

Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2011 4:21 pm
by FatalX
Im not gonna break this down it was a decent peices you could have done better keep posting
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